Talk:No Stairway/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 10:03, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'm MarioSoulTruthFan and I'll be reviewing this article anytime in the next 4-5 days.

Infobox

{{Album infobox → {{Infobox album (edit to copy properly)
- Added editorEهեইдအ😎 18:50, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Add Border
- Added editorEهեইдအ😎 18:50, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
remove release and studio reference since they are already in the article.
- Done editorEهեইдအ😎 18:50, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@EditorE: I forgot this, but how do you know when the album was recorded? There is no mention in the body of the article.
- Removed it editorEهեইдအ😎 17:22, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Unlike Glassline.
- Done editorEهեইдအ😎 18:34, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"first released online in April 2015 and issued on cassette by the label Patient Sounds in August. " → first released online and later issued on cassette by the label Patient Sounds, in April and August of 2015, respectively.
- Done editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"technique; in two" → technique. In two
- Done editorEهեইдအ😎 18:34, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Greenwald recorded people playing" → Greenwald tapped people playing
- Done editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
recordings → find other word, a synonym
- Done editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
In which countries was released as a cassette?
- No source has specified. Fair to assume Worldwide editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Background

"However, he rarely went to the shop and instead bought equipment from local stores like..." → "However, he rarely went to the former shop and instead bought equipment from local stores like..."
- Changed, but why do we need the "former" part of the shop. Only one story was described in the previous sentence editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

It could be a thrift or any other kind shop, just saying "shop" doesn't sound correct, hence why the "former". You are almost done, ping me when you finish. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:58, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"wanted to make a lot out of recording" → poor vocabulary, replace it.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"One day out of boredom, he hung out at a Guitar Center near Atlantic Terminal while waiting for a train, when he heard someone playing a song by Green Day on a guitar and made notice of the instrument's poor tone". → When removing the additional sentence between commas, the other two make no sense whatsoever. Try to re-arrange this
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"I remember thinking like, 'what if I could feed that through these weird reverb pedals I have at home?' 'Would it sound any different?' and it sort of hit me 'why don't I just record other people playing and then sort of use as my paint'". → just use the "..." or quotebox.
- Added quote box editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Production

"what would be the first sound that would later be featured on the album..."→ what would be the first sound to be featured on the album.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"he recorded a guy who" → he taped a guy who (not always using the same words).
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"As he described how he felt when he was editing the sample"→ The singer described how he felt while editing the sample
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Greenwald started recording of the album in a Guitar Center in Brooklyn, then at a shop in Baltimore" → Greenwald started recording the album in a Guitar Center in Brooklyn, and then at a shop in Baltimore.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Greenwald recorded whatever sound he predicted he could make better quality out of when editing them later on" → Greenwald taped whatever sound he thought that could become better in quality when editing them later.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"recordings to work with at his home, where some snippets were played through a 4-track tape recorder or old pedals and some were looped or used as synthesizer patches". → recordings to work at his home. Some snippets were played through a 4-track tape recorder, others were old pedals and some were looped or used as synthesizer patches.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"As Greenwald described" → As described by Greenwald.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎
"There was a lot of panning. There was a lot of trying to connect things that were seemingly un-connectable. A lot of times I would think that a track was finished, but then I remembered that I had some other sound I wanted to use so I would comb back through it and add some fetching little tone somewhere. The editing and the recording processes were married. The studio was very much a part of the instrument." → This quote length is quite big, please user your own words every now and then in the quote.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎

Release and reception

"Patient Sounds distributing the album on cassette on August 6" → In the same year, on August 6, record label Patient Sounds distributed the album on cassette.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"reminders of Guitar Center's commercial success during the 1990s pre-Internet period to a current time where the chain of retailers may shut down quickly due to extreme financial decreases". → reminders of Guitar Center's commercial success during the 1990s pre-Internet period, which contrast with a current time where the chain of retailers may shut down quickly due to extreme financial decrease.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Live at Guitar Center topping the list". → Live at Guitar Center topped the list.
- Fixed editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Make a reference to the genres on the infobox per reviewer, after that remove the references from the infobox.
- Added in production and composition section editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
The album was given a rating grade in some sources, make a note of that in this section
- Only the Pitchfork review had a rating. The rating is now mentioned in the section editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Track listing

I need source for this track listing
- Done editorEهեইдအ😎 17:47, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

References

Most sources have publisher but not work, work is mandatory to GA status.
- Done editorEهեইдအ😎 17:44, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Just a suggestion here: Archive all the links.

Overall GA review

It should be a reference to Greenwald recording, producing and doing everything in the record. Did he also mastered and mixed the records? If not add that.
- Mentioned that he mastered and mixed the album in the production and composition section. Also, it's kind of obvious to the reader in the Background and composition that Greenwald's doing everything, including recording the iPhone snippets and editing them together in Pro Tools. He's the only credit on the album, no one else was involved (if you don't count the people playing the instruments at Guitar Center in the recordings)
Well rounded article, very interesting to read. I recommend a submission to "DYK" after promoted to GA. On hold for 7 days.
- @EditorE: are you done with the edits? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:07, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  - All required comments have been done or responded to editorEهեইдအ😎 18:52, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  - @MarioSoulTruthFan: I appreciate the review and here my stairway to heaven for you! editorEهեইдအ😎 19:33, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]