Talk:No Vacancy Lounge/GA1

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 21:48, 26 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Looks interesting. Review to follow. Harrias talk 21:48, 26 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! ---Another Believer (Talk) 23:26, 26 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

In general, the level of writing is very good. I can normally pick up quite a few minor points in any article I look at, but I'm struggling here!

  • It would be nice to be more precise about when they opened; specify December 2017, rather than simply "late 2017".
  • Did the co-founders work at FOMO Media, or was that just a host venue?
    • The source says, "Sheinin's first attempt to answer that question came in 2014, when No Vacancy began in earnest as an after-hours party in the Northwest Portland offices of FOMO Media, the startup where he worked at the time." I've updated the text to clarify. ---Another Believer (Talk) 23:26, 26 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The interior featured "elegantly designed" Art Deco and high tech production equipment." Was the production equipment Art Deco, or the interior? This could do with re-working slightly.
    • I've added "details". Once source mentions an Art Deco interior, the other Art Deco "detail". I could interpret this as architectural features or furniture, accessories, etc, so to me "details" is vague enough but clarifies the interior and not the equipment. ---Another Believer (Talk) 23:26, 26 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Two weeks after opening, property owners attempted to terminate.." This should be "the property owners". It would also be good to mention them by name, as (assuming they are Melvin Mark Properties) the name kind of comes out of the blue in the next sentence.
    • Well, "property owners" is describing more than one ownership group, so the plural use is correct here. This source mentions Lauren Louise LLC, but I didn't think this was a necessary detail. These are not notable companies, but I added mention of Melvin because there was more coverage mentioning this company in particular. ---Another Believer (Talk) 23:26, 26 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
      • Okay, that's fair enough, I'm happy with it as is then. Harrias talk 06:21, 27 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Later in the year, the venue hosted.." Later in which year?
  • Ref #26 is missing a work/publisher.
  • I would consider being a bit more detailed about the location in the lead.
  • The lead image (the logo) is appropriately tagged with a suitable non-free rationale.
  • The image of the building is appropriately tagged with a CC by-sa 4.0 license.
  • The map, from OpenStreetMaps is appropriately tagged with a CC by-sa 2.0 license.
  • There are no dab links, and all external links are live (and archived).
  • Earwig checks show no evidence of close para-phrasing or copyvio: any duplication is appropriately quoted and generally attributed inline.

Overall, this is a good piece of work, with just a few very minor alterations needed to meet GA status, well done. Harrias talk 22:14, 26 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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