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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 06:28, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Review

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Lead
  • "with some noting similarities" with some isa bit too vague, I guess that it's the wording, tweak it a bit.
Release
  • "Originally set to be released on May 14, 1996, Personal was released" redundancy of "released"
  • I see that "weeks" is used repetitively, try to switch some of the to "issue". Example: "to re-enter at the same position for the week ending on July 20." --> "to re-enter at the same position on the chart issued on July 20."
  • "being moving back"?
  • "exited" is used too much.
  • "tying in with the song's lyric play on reversed gender roles" what does this exactly mean?
Critical
Tracklisting
  • Why not using the template? (it is not mandatory ofc)
Personnel and Credits and personnel
  • Why two different sections?
References
  • All good here.

ΛΧΣ21 06:37, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]