Talk:Spirit of the American Range/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 10:35, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for offering to review this article, IB. I look forward to addressing any concerns you may have. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 17:51, 4 March 2016 (UTC)

• Correct dead links
  • I cannot find a replacement for the KQAC link, and the Internet Archive / Wayback Machine does not help. I added the "dead link" tag, but does this mean the content needs to be removed altogether? ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:32, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• released by Dutch record label Pentatone in February 2015 --> Why not mention the actual release date?
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• The recording was the orchestra's third under Kalmar's leadership --> It was the third recording by the orchestra under Kalmar's leadership
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• It received a Grammy Award nomination for Best Orchestral Performance --> replace "It" with the album name
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• Split the first line of the first para in Background section into two.
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• The album was the third recorded during Carlos Kalmar's tenure --> Same comment as the one in the lead
  • Done (slightly different wording for some variation). ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• It is written for: --> Why the colon sign here?
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:27, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• and received its premier by Serge Koussevitzky conducting the Boston Symphony Orchestra on October 18, 1946 --> and was premiered by Serge Koussevitzky conducting the Boston Symphony Orchestra on October 18, 1946
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:27, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• Same for the third symphony, why are we using colons here?
  • Done. The colons were added by a copy editor, but I agree, they are unnecessary. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• link stream to streaming media
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• The album received a Grammy Award nomination for Best Orchestral Performance, marking the third for Kalmar and the orchestra --> Link the particular year ceremony here somewhere
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• I'm having a readability issue with the Track list. Can't we use the {{track list}} template here?
  • Well, I am not sure how to use the track list template to display information for one classical composition comprising multiple album tracks. Any idea? ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• In the credits section, the footers regarding denoting who is what, can you make it internal wiki-redirects? Like when one clicks on the symbol of ^, it takes them down to " denotes guest musicians".
  • I am not sure how to do this, nor do I think linking is necessary. The symbol definitions are directly below where the symbols are being used. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• Remove the publisher parameters from whichever references you are using, one glance I saw AllMusic and The Oregonian.
  • There is no harm having publishers displayed once. You'll notice the publisher is displayed only the first time a source is being used (The Oregonian, for example). ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• For PDF documents mention page numbers.
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• Online available web links you don't need to give ISSN numbers.
  • Done. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
• Conversely, you would have to give publisher ID/media ID for the cite album notes that you have given, along with the location where the album notes was generated, year etc.
  • Added year. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:26, 5 March 2016 (UTC)

Putting the article on hold, please ping and let me know once the comments are addressed. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 09:36, 5 March 2016 (UTC)

• @IndianBio: Thank you for reviewing this article. I believe I have addressed your concerns, though I did have a question re: the KQAC dead link and I did not remove all publishers. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:33, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
  • Its okay, they were suggestions just anyways and not strict for GA criteria. Congratulations I'm passing the article as a GA now. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 11:32, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
    • Thanks so much! ---Another Believer _(Talk) 16:26, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

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