Talk:Tales of Innocence/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tezero (talk · contribs) 20:05, 14 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be back with a review within a day or two. Tezero (talk) 20:05, 14 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Made some cuts to the lead; feel free to revert but I feel it reads better with less of the intricate detail.
"taken at guilds" - a guild isn't a location, as far as I know. The description of the guild system could use a bit of clarification.
"or post hints about completing a difficult quest" - what's the point of this in the game? Why can't they just tell each other the hints out loud? Or is it that the game only gives the player hints when they're linked up with a friend?
"Mystic Artes (秘奥義 Hi Ougi?)" - why are the kanji needed?
"Gague" - is it actually "gah-gwei" (no idea what language that'd be, but not Japanese), or did you mean "Gauge"?
"unlike many previous Tales protagonists" - what are they usually like?
"to keep the characters' status as heroes undercover" - undercover from whom?
"playing out a skit using the outdoor monitors" - a skit? Was this live-action? Is there anything about the actors chosen or what the skit focused on? Was this only once on multiple screens at once, or was it a standard commercial that ran multiple times a day?
"Voice acting in Tempest was restricted to battles, but the developers wanted to have voice acting for Innocence while keeping as many planned features in the game as possible." - confusing; were they satisfied with corralling their voice acting talents to the mere realm of battles or not?
"a fictional dialect" - I'm aware that the distinction between "language" and "dialect" is muddy (consider Bosnian/Serbian/Croatian/Montegrin vs. Egyptian/Iraqi/Levantine/Moroccan Arabic), but was this an actual new language, as the name implies, or just a dialect of Japanese? (Actually, the marginalized Ryukyuan languages were classified as Japanese dialects until fairly recently, making this a particularly contentious issue.) What are some characteristic features of it? In my experience, Japanese is fairly homogeneous considering the size of its speaker pool.
"coded Japanese" - ???
Why is Additional media a subsection of Reception?
Scores in Reception prose are discouraged; you could probably simply remove them.

Tezero (talk) 02:19, 16 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I've done my best to address all your concerns (Triverse was just described as a "language" in the reference). I also picked up a grammar mistake left over from your edits on the lead. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:10, 16 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I wish there were a bit more about what "code" and altered Japanese meant, but as it stands, this fits the GA criteria; nice job. Tezero (talk) 22:48, 16 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]