Talk:The Art Teacher/GA1

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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 19:19, 11 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead
  • Any information on who produced the song? This comment applies to both the lead and the infobox.
    •  Doing... ---Another Believer (Talk) 23:53, 11 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      • I would not worry about this part, as this song does not appear to have a "producer" in the modern sense of the word. Aoba47 (talk) 02:58, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would spell out EP (i.e. extended play) and put EP in parenthesis next to it when you first use it. Also, add a link for the concept. This comment applies to both the lead and the infobox.
    • I can't do anything about the infobox, but I've adjusted the lead accordingly. Thanks! ---Another Believer (Talk) 23:47, 11 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      • Makes sense, thank you for the reply. Aoba47 (talk) 23:50, 11 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Composition
  • Please add ALT text to the image.
  • I would use Wainwright’s full name in the first sentence.
  • For this sentence (According to The Guardian, "melodically and harmonically it's very minimal, an ostinato song that sounds like a Philip Glass composition.”), I would avoid just putting in the quote in full with much in terms of the contextualization. I would add more of your own words to this part.
Recordings and performances
Reception
  • I am not sure about the structure of the first two paragraphs. I would organize them by some sort of theme or topic if possible. Please reference the following resource to see what I mean. The content is good, but there should be some sort of narrative or organization tactic if possible.
    • @Aoba47: I tried to make the first paragraph comments by music critics reviewing studio recordings, and the second paragraph commentary about a live recording and other people about the song in general. If I've not organized this in a clear way, do you have any specific suggestions? ---Another Believer (Talk) 01:18, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    • One option is to merge the first sentence of the second paragraph to the end of the first, then, merge the 3rd paragraph into the end of the second, leaving just two paragraphs. The first would be about recordings, the second would be other. What do you think? ---Another Believer (Talk) 01:19, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      • Thank you for pointing this out! This makes sense to me. I think that "Reception" section works as it currently stands then. Aoba47 (talk) 01:26, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Credits and personnel
  • I would addd a section like this to list all of the credits and personnel involved with the song. I am pretty sure that this is a required part of the song articles.
    •  Doing... ---Another Believer (Talk) 23:53, 11 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    • Turns out I can't find my liner notes for Want Two. Do you know if Discogs.com works until someone with liner notes can provide a better source? ---Another Believer (Talk) 02:20, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      • Discogs should be fine, as long as you cite as the liner notes for the time being. You can always update in the future when you do find your liner notes if there are any errors from the Discogs sources. Hope this makes sense. Aoba47 (talk) 02:37, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      • Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 02:55, 12 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
External links
  • I would a section like this after the “References” section to include a link to the page in Metrolyrics.
Final comments
  • Good work on this. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Have a wonderful day or night. Aoba47 (talk) 22:50, 11 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Verdict
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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