Talk:USS Ommaney Bay/GA2

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Reviewer: CPA-5 (talk · contribs) 10:01, 29 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Claim my seat here. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 10:01, 29 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

  • It was named after Ommaney Bay, located at the south Is there a link for the bay?
  • I don't think that a small bay located in some remote place in Alaska is notable. Stikkyy t/c 03:58, 2 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • end of Baranof Island, Alaska. Launched in late 1943 Pipe Alaska to the Territory of Alaska.
  • a force of 9,000 horsepower (6,700 kW) Link kW.
  • one on the fore, another on the aft.[3][2][4] Re-oder the refs.
  • equipped with 16 Bofors 40 mm anti-aircraft guns in twin mounts No English units?
  • Casablanca-class carriers had been modified to carry 30 20 mm cannons Try to avoid two separate numbers next to each other.
  • I see three howevers maybe remove two of them due the article is really short to use more than one.
  • Please use four digits instead of three in 24-hour clocks.
  • Link Rear Admiral.
  • only successful interception was when P-47 fighters Maybe link P-47.
  • A TBM torpedo bomber had been hit by the kamikaze's What kind of TBM? TBM-1C or TBM-3 or TBM-1CP?
  • Never specified. Just says torpedo bomber, and since the carrier had 2 torpedo bomber variants, I can't really specify. Certainly not a TBM-1CP, since that's a reconnaissance plane.
  • "air strikes" --> "airstrikes"
  • At 17:45, wounded crew began to be taken --> "At 17:45, wounded the crew began to be taken"
  • "Wounded" not intended to be an adjective. Just serves to highlight how the crew knew that the situation was unsalvageable before the order to abandon ship was given.

Infobox

  • The Awarded part isn't mentioned in the body.
  • United States Pacific Fleet (1943–1945) Maybe replace the years below the unit?

Images

  • File:USS Ommaney Bay (CVE-79) off Hawaii, July 1944.jpg needs a link for its source.
  • File:Cve79a.jpg I cannot get into the source do you have the same problem?

Sources

  • "Rielly, Robin" --> "Rielly, Robin L."
  • Google Books claims that Conway was published in 1984 but the article says 1980 which one is correct?
  • 1980 was original edition, and what I happen to have access to.
  • "Y'Blood, William" --> "Y'Blood, William T."
  • There is an error in the Photo gallery source.

That's anything from me. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 19:15, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@CPA-5: I've responded to all of your points. Stikkyy t/c 03:58, 2 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Looks good to me. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 21:45, 2 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]