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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:28, 20 January 2019 (UTC)

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Balloon pulmonary angioplasty[edit]

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  • ... that Balloon pulmonary angioplasty was refined in Japan? Japanese investigators have refined BPA by using smaller balloons, by cautiously limiting the number of balloon inflations per session to one or two pulmonary vascular segments and by the use of intravascular imaging[1]

Created by Whispyhistory (talk). Self-nominated at 07:57, 28 December 2018 (UTC).

  • May I suggest a hook? Trying to help with what I think is an interesting fact from the article. Use it if you like it, or strike it if you don't MPJ-DK (talk) 04:21, 1 January 2019 (UTC)
  • Reviewing
  • Article is new enough, long enough , has appropriate citations and no copyvio on Earwig
  • Both the hooks are appropriate and supported by inline citations. I prefer these to the options suggested later.
  • I would make the following minor suggestions:
  • Intro "... who are not elegible (correct missing 'e') for pulmonary thromboendarterectomy (PTE) or still have residual pulmonary hypertension [add] 'and areas of stenosis in the pulmonary arterial tree following previous pulmonary endarterectomy.[1]'
  • Intro "...data...are required' rather than 'is...required'
  • Technique: My understanding is that it is used to treat post-thrombotic scarring, stenosis and webs rather than 'disrupts the blood clots and to a lesser degree presses the clots against the walls of the arteries.' It is dealing with cicatrisation rather than thrombus.
  • Complications : Specify the type of vessel injury i.e wire trauma leading to blood vessel perforation, balloon trauma leading to blood vessel dissection and rupture.
  • Research: '...data...are required...'
  • Consider citing the 2017 review by an international group: Lang et al. European Respiratory Review 2017 26: 160119; DOI: 10.1183/16000617.0119-2016
  • Overall. A welcome article on an emerging procedure.Papamac (talk) 17:02, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
  • Thank you @Iainmacintyre: for the detailed review. I've made some amendments. Yes...its an organized thrombus/scarring etc...I'll go through the review you sent and see how to word it for a wider audience. Hugely interesting and I really appreciate your assistance. Adding
  • The issue I have with ALT 3 is that it is not supported by an inline citation and based on assumption. Many of these procedures are done under sedation so the person may not be 'awake'Papamac (talk) 19:50, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
  • I agree..I prefer ALT1 or even proposed hook...not easy to get a catchy one. Sometimes the factual one is most appropriate. Whispyhistory (talk) 20:24, 13 January 2019 (UTC)
  • Hi @Iainmacintyre:. I think I've clarified that the blockages are fibrotic left overs of thrombus and added to complications. Had another ponder over ALT3... no general anaesthetic is required...hence awake. Patients receive local anesthesia and moderate sedation but are still awake.[2]What do you think? Thank you for that source you found- good review article. Whispyhistory (talk) 17:19, 15 January 2019 (UTC)
  • @Whispyhistory:. A good article further improved by these changes. Well done. I'll leave choice of hook to others. Papamac (talk) 09:55, 16 January 2019 (UTC)
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