Template:Did you know nominations/Farouk Topan

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:50, 4 August 2018 (UTC)

Farouk Topan[edit]

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... that Farouk Topan described the English language as "the elephant in the room" in respect of the spread of Kiswahili in East Africa?

Reviewed: King Oak

Created by Philafrenzy (talk) and Whispyhistory (talk). Nominated by Philafrenzy (talk) at 19:55, 15 July 2018 (UTC).

Article: good for newness, length, sourcing, neutrality with no BLP problems, no plagiarism or copyright problems.
Hook: cited, format OK, could be revised
QPQ: done
Issues to address: Mostly, these are just simple issues of writing.

For the hook, I think it would scan better as:

ALT 1:

... that Farouk Topan described the English language as "the elephant in the room" for the spread of Kiswahili in East Africa?

In the article, it seems to me that the second and third paragraphs of the Career section do not follow chronological order, and really should do so. For example, it describes his chairmanship of Swahili and his future students before it describes what he did just after completing his PhD. Please put the content of these two paragraphs into chronological order.

Overall:

--Tryptofish (talk) 00:52, 18 July 2018 (UTC)

Thanks, it's in the correct order. He started at Dar es Salaam in 1968, completed his PhD in 1972, then went to Nairobi. I added some years for clarity. Philafrenzy (talk) 21:08, 19 July 2018 (UTC)

Good, thanks. ALT 1 is good to go. --Tryptofish (talk) 21:21, 19 July 2018 (UTC)