Template:Did you know nominations/Manor Park, Sutton

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:20, 2 December 2014 (UTC)

Manor Park, Sutton[edit]

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... that a cafe in Manor Park, Sutton, is London's first energy efficient building to use straw-bale construction?

Comment: Not a self-nomination.

Created by A P Monblat (talk). Nominated by Launchballer (talk) at 22:27, 19 October 2014 (UTC).

Prose is a little clunky. Two examples: the first sentence should be rearranged and split in two, and the quoted plaque on the fountain simply repeats what has already been said about who donated the fountain and when. Format is also a problem: the war memorial was built before the fountain, and should therefore be described first. Otherwise, the article appears to meet the criteria, and it's about an interesting topic. I also really like the hook. Bahnfrend (talk) 14:18, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Comment: I have made a number of changes to take on board these pointers. A P Monblat (talk) 16:21, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

A number of edits have been made, not only on October 20, but in the month since. A new review should be made to see whether the prose issues have been addressed. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:35, 23 November 2014 (UTC)

Based on what I see, prose issues previously raised were already addressed. New and long enough. No close paraphrasing detected. Hook is cited. However, DYK rules sets one citation per paragraph. Please cite the first paragraph on History. Ping me afterwards and I think it is good to go. --Carlojoseph14 (talk) 08:05, 30 November 2014 (UTC)

To editor Carlojoseph14: The paragraph has now been cited. A P Monblat (talk) 15:03, 30 November 2014 (UTC)

Good to go! --Carlojoseph14 (talk) 01:24, 1 December 2014 (UTC)