Template:Did you know nominations/Noel Money

The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: rejected by Allen3 ^talk 22:00, 18 January 2014 (UTC)
Insufficient progress toward resolving outstanding issues

Noel Money

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• ... that Noel Money was invested as a Companion of the Order of St Michael and St George and the Distinguished Service Order and bar, for a second award?

Created by Jim Sweeney (talk). Nominated by Tentinator (talk) at 13:31, 25 December 2013 (UTC).

• Date, length and hook all OK. I suggest maybe removing a few links (except the invested one) because it may deflect potential views away from the article, but not a major issue. Good to go. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 23:33, 31 December 2013 (UTC)

• The article needs copyediting. Commas are missing and sentences are fragmented, e.g.: "Noel Ernest Money was born in Montreal Canada on 17 March 1867. The eldest son of Captain Albert William Money of the Royal Canadian Rifle Regiment." The last clause in the hook (after the comma) also seems to be hanging without making sense. Yoninah (talk) 01:28, 2 January 2014 (UTC)

• It has been over two weeks without any response or action; the article and hook both still need copyediting, and the nominator hasn't edited on Wikipedia for ten days. It's time to close this nomination. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:21, 18 January 2014 (UTC)