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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:18, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

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Pachara Chirathivat[edit]

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  • ... that while shooting a strangling scene from the 2012 film Countdown, Pachara Chirathivat (pictured) was already suffocating while the crew continued shooting?

5x expanded by 001Jrm (talk). Self-nominated at 21:20, 10 October 2018 (UTC).

  • ALT1: ... that Pachara Chirathivat (pictured) was actually suffocating during a strangling scene in the 2012 film Countdown, but the film crew thought he was just acting? Yoninah (talk) 20:54, 11 November 2018 (UTC)

 Doing... starting review for nomination. Flibirigit (talk) 23:17, 21 November 2018 (UTC)


General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
QPQ: Done.

Overall: Prose count on October 3 (not including charts and infobox) = 1239, as of October 10 = 6170, therefore the readable word count was expanded five times. Checked versions in other languages, and no copying issues found. Citations are needed for the filmography, discography, and videography sections. Close paraphrasing found here In the philanthropy section, please reword "in the final stages of brain cancer", and use a more complete quotation formatting for the other two attributed quotes. There are two closely paraphrased sections from here. Hooks are discussed in the article, but a source needs to be cut and paste into this nomination for a transparent review. Some other non-critical suggestions are adding more categories, and expanding the lead section to summarize all parts of the article. Flibirigit (talk) 23:40, 21 November 2018 (UTC)

Hi! For the first close paraphrasing issue, I added an open quotation mark here, which I forgot to add. For the second one, another editor added that information and it was my fault that I didn't double-check it. I already rephrased the two sentences, though. I also added sources for the ones you've mentioned. Let me know if there are still issues that need to be resolved. Thanks for reviewing. 001Jrm (talk) 02:34, 23 November 2018 (UTC)
Oh, and the source for the hook is found here: "ฉากนี้ แจ็ค (พีช-พชร) ถูกสายไฟรัดคอ แล้วลากไปตามแรงเหวี่ยง ซึ่งในบทต้องเป็นแบบนั้น ทำให้คนในกองถ่ายไม่มีใครรู้ว่า พีชโดยรัดคอจนหายใจไม่ออกจริงๆ เพราะด้วยแอ็คติ้งของตัวละครมันถูกส่งอารมณ์ให้แสดงออกมาแบบนั้น ว่าหายใจไม่ออก ใกล้ตาย แต่ในชีวิตจริง พีช กำลังตกอยู่ในสภาวะนั้น ถึงขนาดทำเอา 2 สาว เต้ย-พีค ถึงกับเกิดอาการตกใจ !!" (language: Thai)
Thanks for the update. I will go through the changes shortly. Flibirigit (talk) 02:41, 23 November 2018 (UTC)
@001Jrm: Adequate citations have been added for the filmography, discography, and videography sections. I have rechecked the paraphrasing issues with the Earwig tool. The only highlighted areas are quotes that are now properly attributed, and proper nouns, neither of which are copyvios. Hooked is now cited as per above, and note [12] in the "Acting career" section of the article. For the record, the google translation read as follows:

"This scene Jack (Peach-Pacha) was strangled. Then drag to the force. In the script must be that. The people in the set did not know that. Peach by the neck until it really does not breathe. With the action of the characters it was sent to express it. In fact, peaches are falling into that state, so much so that they do not even come close to dying."

The only other issues I find are with the introduction and infobox. It mentions that he is a model, but I do not see modelling discussed in the article. Could you find something about modeling to add to the article? Also, the introduction should mention the name of his band, and briefly mention philanthropy. Overall, I think the article is well done, and close to approval. Flibirigit (talk) 03:43, 23 November 2018 (UTC)
I have expanded the introduction, but we still needed to clarify the modeling. Thanks. Flibirigit (talk) 03:55, 23 November 2018 (UTC)
Thank you for expanding the introduction. I removed 'modelling' just because I can't find anything that discusses him doing some modelling. There are some articles of him modelling for brands, so it's most likely just him being a brand ambassador. As much as I want to, I can't expand the information of him modelling. I'll probably just put it back next time when I find enough sources (and time to do it). Thank you again! 001Jrm (talk) 16:22, 27 November 2018 (UTC)
Thanks for looking into the modeling. I have no further questions. I prefer ALT1 as the hook. Flibirigit (talk) 18:22, 27 November 2018 (UTC)
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