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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 11:47, 22 March 2016 (UTC)

Yatai (food cart)[edit]

Traditional Japanese food trucks at a summer festival.
Traditional Japanese food trucks at a summer festival.

5x expanded by Owlsmcgee (talk). Self-nominated at 05:53, 3 March 2016 (UTC).

  • Quite a neat article in all honesty, but a few things need to be rectified. First (and a minor point) the hook must have the nominated article emboldened (and your original hook is grammatically wrong, ala led not lead). Next, some parts of the lede are not rehashed in the body -- not acceptable. Other than that the other criteria check out. Resolve the points raised and I will give this a full assessment. Cheers .Kingoflettuce (talk) 14:00, 3 March 2016 (UTC)
Bolded; gonna go work on the lead now. Will ping when complete. ---Owlsmcgee (talk) 02:21, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
Thanks for the feedback, Kingoflettuce. I've cleared up the lede and re-worked the text, moving what had been in the lede into the article (and what was in the article into the lede). I think it reads better now. Also a bit of WikiProject Japan MOS copy-editing while I was at it. Have a look when you get the chance. Thanks! ---Owlsmcgee (talk) 02:38, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
OK, looks better now. Long enuf, new enuf, neutral in tone and hook is cited by Solt (2014). QPQ has been done, and no copyvio detected. GTG. Kingoflettuce (talk) 06:20, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
Would prefer original hook. Kingoflettuce (talk) 06:20, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
My bad! Forgot to add the (agf on offline/foreign lang sources). Kingoflettuce (talk) 02:30, 21 March 2016 (UTC)