User:Gigisokay/The West Wind (Gould)/TiaIvy Peer Review
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[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
(Gigisokay)
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- User:Gigisokay/The West Wind (Gould)
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Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]Hi Gigisokay,
What you have done is really amazing work! Here are a few of my suggestions to make it even better.
Your first sentence has some grammar issues and is a bit too long. Consider breaking it up into short, concise sentences.
You mentioned that the sculpture is considered one of the most prominent and famous works of the artist. You need to add a citation here because it is a biased claim that not everyone might agree with.
A lead section should be added; the lead summarizes the entire article without going into much detail.
In your second paragraph, you talk about the subject's interpretation, materials used, and the process of its making. I think these concepts can be split into different sections, and perhaps you can elaborate on each section with more details you found.
In your third paragraph, you talk about the artwork's "global fame" and how "Americans loved the neo-classic style..." These are biased pieces of information that are not suitable for Wikipedia. Avoid using phrases such as "a good sum of money" and "Some other good examples."
You already have some hyperlinks which is great; I suggest adding even more hyperlinks for the reader's convenience.
I noticed that you used other Wikipedia articles to cite your sources; however, they are not reliable sources. Your best bet is to go with books or scholarly research articles on JSTOR. If you need help finding sources, try talking to our professor or our class librarian; it is not as hard as you think!
Your work is amazing! I look forward to seeing your article become even better!