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Your submission at Articles for creation: Jennings Motor Group (2) (January 9)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Jcc was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.
jcc (tea and biscuits) 18:46, 9 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]


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Hello! Scr81, I noticed your article was declined at Articles for Creation, and that can be disappointing. If you are wondering why your article submission was declined, please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! jcc (tea and biscuits) 18:46, 9 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.
Scr81 (talk) 13:16, 12 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'm in the process of editing the document along with help from the Teahouse and the online chat.

I've edited the text and removed a lot of the imagery - Can you see anything else that might stop it being seen as factual?

Thanks Scr81 (talk) 13:16, 12 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.
Scr81 (talk) 13:51, 13 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I've been hammering through the article with help from the live chat. The entire article has been edited to ensure it reads better. It seems my eng lit background worked against me! Please can you come back to me with any specific phrases that you felt were not suitable for article and I will happily edit them. Thanks, Scr81 (talk) 13:51, 13 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Scr81, I can see that you have edited the article greatly, however I still feel that it seems too advertisery in tone. Particular sections included the "Later Management Changes and Expansion" section, which I feel is totally unnecessary, I'm sure a few sentences will suffice (like how you have described the earlier years) instead of a year by year list. Do ask if you have any more questions. jcc (tea and biscuits) 16:25, 13 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I've provisionally come up with this: (I know it still need fixing, but can you help?)

In 1984 Jennings purchased the Yarm Road dealership in Stockton on Teesside and later the Washington site. Further changes came in 1995 when Jennings purchased the dealership in South Shields after Alan Bentley took over as Managing Director following a buyout from the Jennings family. Expansion continued with the addition of the Gateshead site in 1996 which now houses Jennings Ford Gateshead and the Transit Centre, the Cargo Fleet Lane Supersite in Middlesbrough in 2000, the first non-Ford franchise for the Jennings Motor Group - Jennings Mazda opened in 2003 at Washington, and purchase of Arriva Ford in 2003 which later moved to the former Ferguson Transport Depot in 2006.

By 2004 it had added SEAT, Suburu and a Ford commercial site to the Middlesbrough site and in 2005 another management buyout made Nas Khan the Managing Director.

In 2007 Vertu paid £2.6m to Jennings Group for its Ford dealership in Morpeth and in 2010 it sold the Sunderland site to Sainsburys.

In 2012 Leeds Harley-Davidson opened under the management of Sohail Khan, Nas Khan's son. In 2015 the Jennings Motor Group officially took over the dealership after a Management buyout and it is due to open a second Harley-Davidson dealership in Gateshead later in 2016.

With the change to Kia in 2011 at the Washington Dealership, the company opened Britains biggest Kia Dealership at a new Stockton site in 2013 and added Mitsubishi to the Middlesbrough site.

Scr81 (talk) 16:52, 13 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"In 1984 Jennings purchased the Yarm Road dealership in Stockton on Teesside and later the Washington site. In 1995, the new managing director purchased the dealership in South Shield, after a buyout of the company from the Jennings family. The following year, a site in Gateshead was bought which now houses Jennings Ford Gateshead and the Transit Centre"... I started to edit it, but I now actually think that perhaps I was mistaken. Maybe you should just include the key purchases, or if you can't decide on any key ones, just do every other one etc. as this history of dealerships is going to be very long otherwise. jcc (tea and biscuits) 22:22, 13 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I attempted to change it but it didn't work - is the new format an acceptable compromise? I've removed some of the information and condensed it wherever I can. I think keeping it split into decades makes it clearer. I removed the Jennings Harley-Davidson section and incorporated it into the later management section. Scr81 (talk) 10:21, 14 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, I personally think that it's fine, and if I were to review it now, I would accept it. I have formatted some of your images for you, now just resubmit it and see what another reviewer thinks! Good luck, jcc (tea and biscuits) 17:24, 15 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Jennings Motor Group (2) (January 16)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Onel5969 was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.
Onel5969 TT me 18:32, 16 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Scr81 (talk) 10:54, 28 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Tseung Kwan O was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.
Tseung Kwan O (talk) 22:24, 8 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, Scr81. It has been over six months since you last edited your Articles for Creation draft article submission, "Jennings Motor Group".

In accordance with our policy that Articles for Creation is not for the indefinite hosting of material deemed unsuitable for the encyclopedia mainspace, the draft has been nominated for deletion. If you plan on working on it further, or editing it to address the issues raised if it was declined, simply edit the submission and remove the {{db-afc}} or {{db-g13}} code.

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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. 1989 (talk) 07:20, 16 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

AfC notification: Draft:Jennings Motor Group (2) has a new comment

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I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at Draft:Jennings Motor Group (2). Thanks! Theroadislong (talk) 22:35, 17 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: Jennings Motor Group (2) has been accepted

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Jennings Motor Group (2), which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created.
The article has been assessed as C-Class, which is recorded on the article's talk page. You may like to take a look at the grading scheme to see how you can improve the article.

You are more than welcome to continue making quality contributions to Wikipedia. Note that because you are a logged-in user, you can create articles yourself, and don't have to post a request. However, you may continue submitting work to Articles for Creation if you prefer.

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DGG ( talk ) 03:57, 21 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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Thanks for message. Some problems

  • The article appeared to signifcantly copy from their website (not the US weather page tagged by the nominator!)
  • You need to provide independent verifiable sources to enable us to verify the facts and show that it meets the notability guidelines. You have relied rather heavily on their own website, mainly for history, which could be OK, but you need to consider how you use it, stick to facts
  • The notability guidelines for organisations and companies have been updated. The primary criteria has five components that must be evaluated separately and independently to determine if it is met:
  1. significant coverage in
  2. independent,
  3. multiple,
  4. reliable,
  5. secondary sources.
Note that an individual source must meet all four criteria to be counted towards notability. Your other sources are generally pretty good, but the claim for the number of employees is unsourced
  • it was written in a promotional tone. Articles must be neutral and encyclopaedic. Examples of unsourced or self-sourced claims presented as fact include: I felt this was a chance too good for us to pass up on, and now we’re determined to develop our reputation of one of the UK’s leading Suzuki franchises in the Preston area. The boss's opinion is rarely a good idea in an article, and reinforces why you need to be careful using their website as a source.

I've seen far worse, and I'll restore as a slightly cleaned up version if you wish, just let me know Jimfbleak - talk to me? 11:01, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]