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Battle of Powick Bridge[edit]
The Battle of Powick Bridge was pretty normal battle for the First English Civil War. Neither side seemed to know what the other was about, the stumbled across each other, fought largely ineffectively, and then one lot ran away. The engagement is probably most notable for enhancing Prince Rupert's reputation as a cavalry commander. The article has been through a Good article review and MILHIST A-class review. Although I am playing in the WikiCup, that concludes at the end of this month, and so this is not a WikiCup nomination. Harrias (he/him) • talk 14:41, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
- This article is beautifully written, a pleasure to read, well organized, well prepared for FAC, and I can find only two nits to pick. 1) Awadewit used to go nuts about not having images looking off the page; is it possible to move the image of Sir John Byron, and the image of the dragoons, from the right to the left, so they will be facing the text? 2) Were it not for how much I hate collapsed navigational templates in articles at all, much less in the leads, I would be a Support, but that's just one of my little personal pet peeves :) When MILHIST starts placing navigational templates horizontally at the bottom of articles, I'll be tickled pink and more inclined towards supporting! Best, SandyGeorgia (Talk) 17:12, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks for the kind words Sandy. The nav template is out of my hands: I'm not keen on the placement either (this has also irritated me on the athletics articles I've recently worked on, such as 1987 World Championships in Athletics – Women's marathon). With regards to the images, I'm torn. I agree that they tend to look better facing the text, but I don't like left-aligned images indenting level 2 headers, which would happen in this article. I'll have to have a think on this. Harrias (he/him) • talk 09:53, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
- Not a problem at all! Best, SandyGeorgia (Talk) 13:22, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks for the kind words Sandy. The nav template is out of my hands: I'm not keen on the placement either (this has also irritated me on the athletics articles I've recently worked on, such as 1987 World Championships in Athletics – Women's marathon). With regards to the images, I'm torn. I agree that they tend to look better facing the text, but I don't like left-aligned images indenting level 2 headers, which would happen in this article. I'll have to have a think on this. Harrias (he/him) • talk 09:53, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
Image review
- The dragoon is missing alt text
- File:John1stLordByron.jpg: source link is dead, needs US PD tag
- File:Mounted_dragoon.jpg needs a US PD tag. Nikkimaria (talk) 22:09, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
Source review and comments by Jr8825
- Excellent article, I completely agree with SandyGeorgia about it being a very enjoyable and informative read. I found the contextual information particularly useful. I fixed two minor issues, a missing comma and a mistake with a single-page ref format (pp. instead of p.).
I spot-checked Gaunt (refs 1, 2, 7, 11, 12, 19, 22, 27, 31)
- fn 1 Gaunt writes "many contemporaries [believed] civil war became possible or likely; many historians agree with these views" – the article's wording "made civil war inevitable" seems quite a bit stronger than this to me.
- fn 2 The article says commissions of array "had not been used for almost a century", while the source text says it "had largely fallen into abeyance after the mid sixteenth century, though it had been revived and employed by the king only a couple of years before, during the Bishops' Wars."
- Another good point. Expanded to "..a medieval device for levying soldiers which had not been used for almost a century until the king reintroduced it during the Bishops' Wars (1639–1640)." Harrias (he/him) • talk 20:58, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
- fn 27b doesn't support the sentence it's attached to and should be moved to the previous sentence, perhaps the structure was changed while writing or editing.
The only other issue I came across was that Scott, Turton and Gruber von Arni describe Worcester as "staunchly loyal to Charles" (p.14) which contradicts the article's description of the city as "predominantly sympathetic towards the Parliamentarians" (I haven't got access to Atkin). Once these issues are cleared up the article has my full support. Cheers, Jr8825 • Talk 20:26, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
- This is not unusual, irritatingly. The literature is often split on which side a place favoured. While I think Atkin has this right, I have removed it completely. Worcester became known as staunchly Royalist later in the war, but from everything I have seen, it leaned towards the Parliamentarians until this point. But as I say, safer to remove it given the ambiguity. Harrias (he/him) • talk 20:58, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
Thanks for the review, and the minor fixes Jr8825. Harrias (he/him) • talk 20:58, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks for making those changes. The rest of the sources look solid and it's a pass for the source review. I'm happy to support the article for promotion. Jr8825 • Talk 22:28, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
Support from Gog the Mild[edit]
If it merits it in size I shall be claiming points in the WikiCup for this review.
I gave this a thorough, FAC style, review at ACR. At Harrias's request. Let's see what is left for me to pick at.
- "before covering the Royalist move towards London". Maybe rephrase? Possibly to replace "covering" with 'followed'?
- "Despite the manoeuvrings between the King and Parliament". Does this refer to the physical manoeuvring of military forces?
- "arms and equipment collected for the earlier Bishops' Wars" Optional: add ', between England and Scotland'?
- "Sir John Byron's convoy" section. Perhaps clarify that Byron's cavalry regiment accompanied/escorted the convoy. Assuming that it did. If it did, what happened to it subsequently? Was it involved in the battle?
- Clarified to "Byron's regiment left with a large convoy..". I'm pretty sure the regiment didn't take part in the battle, but the closest to confirmation I can find is in the ODNB: "The relief was provided on the 23rd by Prince Rupert, who routed the enemy advance guard at Powick Bridge and gave Sir John time to get his convoy clear." Harrias (he/him) • talk 13:23, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
- Fair enough.
- "either the internal or external threats". Er, what internal threats?
- It did, yes. :-)
- "Worcester was also surrounded" Perhaps lose "also"?
- "Nathaniel Fiennes, another of the Parliamentarian officers present, Colonel Edwin Sandys" So which one was "the Parliamentarian officer"?
- Are you trying to say something like 'According to a report written by or for Nathaniel Fiennes, a Parliamentarian officer who was an eyewitness, Colonel Edwin Sandys – another of the Parliamentarian officers present ..."?
- Ummm, yes, sort of. How is "According to a report written by or for one of the Parliamentarian officers present, Nathaniel Fiennes, Colonel Edwin Sandys – one of his fellow officers – argued that they should continue..", which I have now changed it to? Harrias (he/him) • talk 16:07, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- Are you trying to say something like 'According to a report written by or for Nathaniel Fiennes, a Parliamentarian officer who was an eyewitness, Colonel Edwin Sandys – another of the Parliamentarian officers present ..."?
- "argued that they should continue towards Worcester" Would 'return to Worcester' not flow better?
- "Cavalry tactics in the two forces differed" Possibly preface with a definite article?
- "were able to continue on a slow approach towards London" I'm not sure about "on".
Gog the Mild (talk) 18:08, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
- Cheers Gog the Mild, some replies above. Harrias (he/him) • talk 13:23, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
- And replies to replies. Gog the Mild (talk) 13:31, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Gog the Mild: And some replies to your replies to replies. Thanks. Harrias (he/him) • talk 16:13, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- And replies to replies. Gog the Mild (talk) 13:31, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
- Blast from the past. That all looks good to me.Supporting. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:19, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Support by Ceoil[edit]
Support this impressive article, mostly direct edited as reading, feel free to revert, but have a few non-deal breaking quibbles:
- Cheers, I reverted one change: [2] as it was Rupert who had the time to prepare his men (which they needed, as some were unarmoured), do you think this still needs to be made clearer? Harrias (he/him) • talk 07:51, 25 October 2020 (UTC)
- Brown covered his cavalry's escape - I don't know what this means. Should we link suppressive fire?
- the north–south flowing Severn - is the river's direction relevant
- and many removed their armour- same, relevant? I get what is implied, but it seems overly vague.
- I wasn't sure where " Peter Gaunt and Trevor Royle describe " ended. Is When Sandys and his cavalry troop emerged into the field, they were faced with point-blank gunfire from the dragoons also per their analysis
- That's it. Ceoil (talk) 23:00, 24 October 2020 (UTC)
CommentsSupport by PM[edit]
Haven't looked at this before, so have a few comments:
- Lead
- explain in the lead that Byron was concerned about the proximity of the Parliamentarians, and that was why he sought refuge at Worcester and called for assistance
- the use of covered and covering in the lead isn't ideal. Perhaps describe Brown's stand as a rearguard, and I'm not sure what is meant by "covering the Royalist move"
Just getting started, placing a marker. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:22, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
- Body
- suggest linking Conscription#Medieval levies
- link arsenal
- link East Midlands
- Maybe I'm being pedantic here, but the lead says Byron "requested assistance", but the body says he "awaited reinforcements" but doesn't mention a request.
- say who or what Nathaniel Fiennes was
- it isn't clear how many troops Byron himself had
- The article states "In August, he occupied Oxford with that 160-strong regiment until it was forced to withdraw on 10 September by a larger Parliamentarian force. Byron's regiment left with a large convoy of gold and silver plate donated by Oxford University.." Do you think this needs reiterating elsewhere? Harrias (he/him) • talk 15:42, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- No, I have self-administered an uppercut. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:55, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- I know a fair bit about military drill formations, and I don't see how putting a formation into files creates a greater frontage than one in ranks, or how files are shallower than ranks
- If you have 60 men with files 6 deep, you have a frontage of 10 men. If you have 60 men with files 3 deep (shallower files) then you have a frontage of 20 men? Harrias (he/him) • talk 15:42, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- That's fine, but what we are really talking about here is number of ranks, depth of files is a far more obscure concept for the lay reader. I suggest "Deploying in shallower formations than the Parliamentarians to allow a greater frontage,..." Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:08, 1 November 2020 (UTC)
- @Peacemaker67: That works for me, adopted that, thanks. Harrias (he/him) • talk 08:37, 1 November 2020 (UTC)
- That's fine, but what we are really talking about here is number of ranks, depth of files is a far more obscure concept for the lay reader. I suggest "Deploying in shallower formations than the Parliamentarians to allow a greater frontage,..." Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:08, 1 November 2020 (UTC)
- If you have 60 men with files 6 deep, you have a frontage of 10 men. If you have 60 men with files 3 deep (shallower files) then you have a frontage of 20 men? Harrias (he/him) • talk 15:42, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- Fiennes' article says he distinguished himself in this battle, cited to Encyclopædia Britannica. Could this be worked in somewhere?
- I'll have a look at this, but that claim will almost certainly be based off Fiennes' own account of the battle. I could rephrase "Fiennes said that he managed to control his cavalry and hold fire until the charging Royalists were close enough.." to something like "Fiennes said that he alone managed to control his cavalry and hold fire until the charging Royalists were close enough..", but I'm not keen on going much further than that. Harrias (he/him) • talk 15:42, 28 October 2020 (UTC)
- same point about the rearguard as in the lead
- link Puritans
- Sources
- Lost Battlefields of Britain by Martin Hackett has some additional detail, as does Britain in Revolution: 1625-1660 by Austin Woolrych.
That's me done, not a full source review, just looked for sources that have not been used that add useful detail. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:13, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
- Cheers Peacemaker67, I think I've responded to each point above, let me know. Harrias (he/him) • talk 16:34, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- Nice work, supporting. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:08, 1 November 2020 (UTC)
CommentsSupport by CPA-5[edit]
Will do this later. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 11:13, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
- The Battle of Powick Bridge was a skirmish Do the sources say skirmish or battle? If it's skirmish why is the article called with "battle" instead of "skirmish"? If it's a battle then replace skirmish with battle.
- fought on 23 September 1642 just south of Worcester Per MOS:OSNS maybe add a note here which calender this article uses and what are the difrences?
- None of the sources I have for the battle have anything about this. Do you have any? MOS:OSNS says that further information is only needed "Where it's not obvious that a given date should be given in Julian alone or in Gregorian alone" However, it says that the Gregorian calendar was only adopted in "the British Empire from 14 September 1752", and so I don't see the need for clarification here. Harrias (he/him) • talk 16:01, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- MOS:OSNS also says "If there is a need to mention Old or New Style dates in an article (as in the Glorious Revolution), a footnote should be provided on the first usage, stating whether the New Style refers to a start of year adjustment or to the Gregorian calendar (it can mean either)." so why not add a note with the explanation of the calendar England used?
- The point being that in the Glorious Revolution it discussed events and communications occurring in both England and continental Europe, and so both date styles are used, and so there is a need to mention it. There is no such need in this article. Harrias (he/him) • talk 14:48, 7 November 2020 (UTC)
- That's true but I'm not confident that there's no note to it. Maybe that's just me, a continental European but for people who knows both calenders is a thing that could be misleading to them. But whatever I don't think we're getting there; I don't think it would, need or have to be changed since in all documents of the UK it is written in Old Style and this probably would be the case in other former colonies. Thus for almost all native English speakers, it wouldn't be a problem. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 18:36, 7 November 2020 (UTC)
- @CPA-5: Okay, okay, I've added a short note, how is that? Harrias (he/him) • talk 19:09, 7 November 2020 (UTC)
- Maybe also add the 10-day difference since probably not a lot of people would know about these? Also, I was just saying my point. I almost had the feeling I was manipulating or boycotting you with my POV which is not the case I just wanted to say my fair point and if you still disagree then I still would support it since I don't really care about this with the exception of the continental European thing of course. Anyway, cheers just wanted to say this disclaimer. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 19:27, 7 November 2020 (UTC)
- @CPA-5: I'm not inclined to add anything else. For those that are aware of the Julian/Gregorian OS/NS calendar, the information provided is enough. For those that aren't aware, but are interested, the note has links. For most, the difference is small and irrelevant, and the more information provided here, the more likely they are to get confused. Harrias (he/him) • talk 19:53, 7 November 2020 (UTC)
- The Royalists sent reinforcements under Prince Rupert MOS:EGG here.
- You are misinterpreting MOS:EGG. There is nothing wrong with piped links, as long as they do not mislead the reader. In England, Prince Rupert of the Rhine was known most commonly as simply "Prince Rupert", which is almost unanimously used in English Civil War sources. Indeed Prince Rupert is a redirect to Prince Rupert of the Rhine. Harrias (he/him) • talk 16:01, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- used for almost a century until the king reintroduced --> "used for almost a century until the King reintroduced"
- @Gog the Mild: You are my expert on these? Harrias (he/him) • talk 16:01, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- As it is a mention of a specific, identifiable king, and as "king" could be replaced with their name, yes, the k should be upper case. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:39, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- equipment collected for the earlier Bishops' Wars DUB link here.
- During the first Siege of Hull When?
- in April and July, by the Parliamentarian governor Who?
- Sir John Byron was a strong supporter Add here a note which states "He would later become known as the John Byron, 1st Baron Byron."
- reinforced early that day by Prince Rupert Introduction or note like above is maybe needed since his link goes to the "Prince Rupert of the Rhine" which makes it a MOS:EGG.
- army of the Dutch Republic which was the preeminent force in the early 17th century Per Ngram pre-eminent is a little bit popular than this one.
- Per MOS:COMMONALITY "When more than one variant spelling exists within a national variety of English, the most commonly used current variant should usually be preferred, except where the less common spelling has a specific usage in a specialized"
- "Sandys'" --> "Sandys's" per the apostrophe should have an extra "s" except with Bible figures and in awkward situations. I don't think it's awkward.
- including Prince Maurice and Henry Wilmot, were injured MOS:EGG here.
- Again, this is a piped link, not an EGG; again, this is the common usage in Civil War sources; and again, Prince Maurice is a redirect to that page anyway. Harrias (he/him) • talk 16:01, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- across the north–south flowing Severn --> "across the north–south-flowing Severn"?
- retreat of Sandys' men, and forced to abandon Remove the unnecessary double space.
That's anything from me. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 12:26, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Comments Support by Z1720[edit]
Here are suggestions on the prose. A lot of my comments are about the use of too many commas; sometimes it is a concern about the number of commas in a sentence and other times it is a comma before "and" or "but" (but not concerning Oxford commas and lists, I think). Although commas are great for pausing a sentence and increased clarity, I find too many make the prose choppy. I totally understand if you disagree but please make a note under each suggestion below if you don't like the restructuring. Please ping me when you have finished the comments so I can take a second look.
- Hi Z1720, Harrias is temporarily unable to access Wikipedia and so has asked if I would address your comments, giving me a free hand to alter the article. We are currently collaborating on a Civil War article, and I gave this article a pre-GAN copy edit so I am familiar with it. It is even possible that the surplus commas are mine. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:50, 10 December 2020 (UTC)
Lede
The Royalists sent reinforcements under Prince Rupert, while the Parliamentarians sent a detachment, commanded by Colonel John Brown, to try to capture the convoy.
This has lots of commas and feels choppy. Maybe try, "The Royalists sent reinforcements under Prince Rupert, while the Parliamentarians, commanded by Colonel John Brown, sent a detachment to try to capture the convoy."
- I think that there is too much information attempting to squeeze into a single sentence. So I have split it: "The Royalists despatched a force commanded by Prince Rupert. Meanwhile, the Parliamentarians sent a detachment, under Colonel John Brown, to try to capture the convoy." How does that flow?
"Their route took them up narrow lanes, and straight into..."
Remove comma?
- Harrias is clearly a disciple of the Oxford comma. I am not. It has gone.
Build-up of the First English Civil War
"In anticipation of a likely conflict, both sides began preparing for war, attempting to recruit...."
Change to "both sides prepared for war and attempted to recruit..." to remove extra verbs and the comma.
- I have replaced the comma with "and". (Your suggestion didn't reduce the number of verbs.)
- About the verbs: whoops. My bad. Thanks for the change.
- I have replaced the comma with "and". (Your suggestion didn't reduce the number of verbs.)
During the first Siege of Hull, Charles was twice refused entrance into the city, in April and July 1642, by the Parliamentarian governor.
There's lots of commas here that make this sentence choppy. Maybe try, "During the first Siege of Hull, Charles was twice refused entrance into the city by the Parliamentarian governor in April and July 1642."
- A slight variant on your suggestion, with still but a single comma.
North of England, the East Midlands and Wales...
thensouth-east of England, had plentiful arms, and controlled the navy
WP:Oxford comma doesn't care if you use it or not, but there should be consistency.
- Oxford commas removed.
armies did not begin to significantly manoeuvre
Remove "begin to" as redundant.
- Done.
Sir John Byron's convoy
with a large convoy of gold and silver plate
I am confused by this, and I'm looking at the disambaug page for plate and am still confused. Is plate supposed to be plural? Is this a dinner plate or a construction plate? Is there a different definition that I'm missing?
- Used in the sense, from Wikionary, of "[s]ilver or gold, in the form of a coin, or less often silver or gold utensils or dishes".
- Added a pipe link to Household silver, which should help. Harrias (he/him) • talk 19:54, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
Parliamentarian army, and chose to seek refuge.
Remove comma?
- Already done in the mass extermination above.
On 16 September, he stopped at Worcester, a large town on the River Severn, which was surrounded by medieval city walls, though they were in poor condition.
Sentence is choppy. I would say, "On 16 September, he stopped at Worcester, a large town on the River Severn, which was surrounded by medieval city walls in poor condition."
- Done.
Prelude
a parallel path, through Coventry and towards Worcester...
Remove this comma.
- Gone.
According to a report written by or for one of the Parliamentarian officers present, Nathaniel Fiennes, Colonel Edwin Sandys – one of his fellow officers – argued that they should move closer...
This sentence sounds very choppy because of the commas and hyphens. I don't know if you need "one of his fellow officers" as I assume from the sentence that Sandys is a Parliamentarian officer.
- Good point. How is this, which I have changed the article to: "One of the Parliamentarian officers present, Nathaniel Fiennes, wrote or had written a report; in it he stated that one of his fellow officers, Colonel Edwin Sandys, argued that they should move closer to Worcester to prevent the convoy from escaping."?
- I think this sentence is still confusing, as
wrote or had written a report
sounds like you are saying the same thing in two different verb tenses. Maybe, "One of the Parliamentarian officers present, Nathaniel Fiennes, either wrote a report or had one written for him about the convoy. In this report, it was stated that fellow officer Colonel Edwin Sandys argued they should move closer to Worcester to prevent the convoy from escaping."- I have gone with "One of the Parliamentarian officers present, Nathaniel Fiennes, either wrote a report or had it written for him. In this, it was stated that fellow officer Colonel Edwin Sandys argued they should move closer to Worcester to prevent the convoy from escaping." Does that work?
- It works!
- I have gone with "One of the Parliamentarian officers present, Nathaniel Fiennes, either wrote a report or had it written for him. In this, it was stated that fellow officer Colonel Edwin Sandys argued they should move closer to Worcester to prevent the convoy from escaping." Does that work?
- I think this sentence is still confusing, as
- Good point. How is this, which I have changed the article to: "One of the Parliamentarian officers present, Nathaniel Fiennes, wrote or had written a report; in it he stated that one of his fellow officers, Colonel Edwin Sandys, argued that they should move closer to Worcester to prevent the convoy from escaping."?
Unknown to the Parliamentarians...
This sentence has lots of commas (but is not a list) so I think it should be broken up into two sentences.
- Done.
Battle
...Sandys's men, and forced...
Remove the comma.
- Already done.
Aftermath
which was carried away in the flight.
This part is ambiguous. Do you mean that the Lifeguard joined in the retreat?
- Yes. I am not seeing the ambiguity. What is the other possible meaning.
- I think my confusion is because I've never heard the expression "carried away in the flight." I am OK with the expression staying in the sentence but I would like it worded to remove the excessive commas.
- 2 of 3 commas removed. I have also linked "carried away" to rout; it is a duplink but sems permissible in this case.
- I think my confusion is because I've never heard the expression "carried away in the flight." I am OK with the expression staying in the sentence but I would like it worded to remove the excessive commas.
- Yes. I am not seeing the ambiguity. What is the other possible meaning.
established Rupert's reputation as a cavalry commander...
I think you should say "established Rupert's negative reputation" to make it clear to the reader sooner that his reputation was negatively effected.
- It wasn't. It did what the article says, established his reputation as a (leading/good/inspired/aggressive/whatever) cavalry commander.
- When I read
"rendered the name of Prince Rupert very terrible"
I thought it was saying the Rupert was a terrible commander. Maybe put "established Rupert's reputation as an effective cavalry commander"?- Ah. It is a quote, so I can't tweak it. It means, in the speech of the day, that he struck terror into his opponents, I have changed the earlier part of the sentence to "The battle established Rupert's reputation as an effective cavalry commander".
- When I read
- It wasn't. It did what the article says, established his reputation as a (leading/good/inspired/aggressive/whatever) cavalry commander.
The Parliamentarians took a less direct route to the capital, but still arrived there first, and after further battles at Brentford and Turnham Green, Charles withdrew to Oxford to establish winter quarters.
I would split this into two sentences, "The Parliamentarians took a less direct route to the capital but still arrived there first. After further battles at Brentford and Turnham Green, Charles withdrew to Oxford to establish winter quarters."
- Good point. Done.
the Third English Civil War, the Battle of Worcester was a....
Add a comma after "Worcester"
- Done.
That's it for the first round! Z1720 (talk) 18:25, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
- Just realised this is still outstanding; had completely forgot about it, and only have limited access at the moment. Will try and get it done ASAP. Harrias (he/him) • talk 07:52, 2 December 2020 (UTC)
- Hi Z1720, some excellent stuff there. See my introductory note above. All of your comments have been addressed above and I await with interest your further thoughts. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:50, 10 December 2020 (UTC)
- My responses are posted above. Sorry for the delay. I will do another look-through of the article in the coming days. Z1720 (talk) 01:11, 12 December 2020 (UTC)
- Z1720, thank you for that. I have, I think, clarified all of the areas which you were not content with. Gog the Mild (talk) 13:53, 12 December 2020 (UTC)
- All of my prose concerns have been addressed.
- Z1720, thank you for that. I have, I think, clarified all of the areas which you were not content with. Gog the Mild (talk) 13:53, 12 December 2020 (UTC)
- My responses are posted above. Sorry for the delay. I will do another look-through of the article in the coming days. Z1720 (talk) 01:11, 12 December 2020 (UTC)
- Hi Z1720, some excellent stuff there. See my introductory note above. All of your comments have been addressed above and I await with interest your further thoughts. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:50, 10 December 2020 (UTC)
Mini-Source Review
Why do " Edgehill: The Battle Reinterpreted" and " Decisive Battles of the English Civil War" have links to Google books, but the other sources do not?
I could only read the Woolrych book online, but the quote and info are in there.
That's it from me. Z1720 (talk) 17:51, 12 December 2020 (UTC)
- Harrias may well have a perfectly good explanation for that, but as I don't know what it might be I have standardised things by removing them. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:47, 12 December 2020 (UTC)
- Closing note: This candidate has been promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 23:39, 12 December 2020 (UTC)
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