Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/History of Tottenham Hotspur F.C./archive1
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The article was promoted by Sarastro1 via FACBot (talk) 23:10, 24 January 2019 [1].
- Nominator(s): Hzh (talk · contribs), Govvy (talk · contribs) & Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:23, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
This article is has come together nicely. Hzh has done alot of heavy lifting here and I can't see anything actionable prose- or comprehensiveness-wise. With three nominators issues should be dealt with promptly. Have at it. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:23, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- I'll try to weigh in here, as well as here and here. The nominators could help one another, me, and the community, by commenting on the other two pages. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 10:55, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Okay @Dweller: we're ready.....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:35, 23 December 2018 (UTC)
- See below. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 10:25, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- Okay @Dweller: we're ready.....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:35, 23 December 2018 (UTC)
Support Comments from SN54129
[edit]You've done a job of work on this and no mistake. A couple of points on prose that jump out at a skim read. No major malfunctions though.
- Background
president until 1894, would became an important
> become
- Done. Hzh (talk) 15:23, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Early years
between themselves, the number of friendly fixtures against other clubs however would gradually increase
> In the first two years, the boys largely played games between themselves; the number of friendly fixtures against other clubs would, however, gradually increase
- Done. Hzh (talk) 15:23, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
this was changed for 1895 to 1898
> from?
- Changed to "changed in 1895" (the 1898 date is probably unnecessary since the following sentence showed that it changed again in
18991898). Hzh (talk) 15:23, 10 December 2018 (UTC) Error corrected. Hzh (talk) 15:51, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Changed to "changed in 1895" (the 1898 date is probably unnecessary since the following sentence showed that it changed again in
- Professional status
On this the London Football Association found the club
> On this, the London Football Association found the club
- Wording adjust. Hzh (talk) 15:23, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
agreed to play for Spurs, but arrived without any kit
> agreed to play for Spurs but arrived without any kit
- Done. Hzh (talk) 15:23, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
However, press coverage over the incidence raised
> However, press coverage over the incident raised
- Done. Hzh (talk) 15:23, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
found the club guilty of professionalism with financial inducement to attract a player to the club after Fulham complained of poaching of their player
- Makes for heavy reading this; certainly a comma is required after "club", but is it possible to tighten the sentence? Possibly by splitting it? Also, can the phrase "professionalism with financial inducement" be linked or otherwise clarified—for example, is it a legal term, the term the source uses, or your rewording of the source?
- Both "professionalism" and "financial inducement" are found in various sources, although some sources use "unfair inducement" which may be the original judgement as they used it in quotation marks. I have decide to rewrite it as
Fulham then complained to the London Football Association that Tottenham had poached their player and were guilty of professionalism having breached amateur rules. On the latter charge, the London Football Association found Tottenham guilty as the payment for the boots was judged an 'unfair inducement' to attract the player to the club.
I hope this is satisfactory. Hzh (talk) 16:29, 10 December 2018 (UTC) Wording adjusted. Hzh (talk) 18:53, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Both "professionalism" and "financial inducement" are found in various sources, although some sources use "unfair inducement" which may be the original judgement as they used it in quotation marks. I have decide to rewrite it as
- Makes for heavy reading this; certainly a comma is required after "club", but is it possible to tighten the sentence? Possibly by splitting it? Also, can the phrase "professionalism with financial inducement" be linked or otherwise clarified—for example, is it a legal term, the term the source uses, or your rewording of the source?
Charles Roberts and a local businessman John Oliver
> Charles Roberts and local businessman John Oliver
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:21, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
took up post as the first ever manager of Spurs
>took up postwas appointed the first manager of Spurs.
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:21, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
cup-winning
> should this be Cup-winning? I'm not too sure myself, but I'm leaning towards it being a proper noun.
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:21, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- 1901 FA Cup
Kirkham however was not a success
> Kirkham, however, was not a success
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:21, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Highs and lows
charge however saw Spurs unexpectedly relegated
> charge, however, saw Spurs unexpectedly relegated
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:21, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
Tresadern however failed to lift
> Again, add commas. Note—however!—that this is one of the most over- and mis-used words in wirtten English. I know this is a big article, but you use it over seventy times; they're not all necessary. I'm not going to comment on them again, but suggest ctrl+f and eliminating those you don't need (most of them) and adding commas where you do.
- Thanks for the suggestion. I have removed/reworded some of these so that it won't get too repetitive, will go through the others to see how they might be rewritten. Hzh (talk) 17:21, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
Peter McWilliam returned to Spurs, and tried to rebuild
> Peter McWilliam was brought back as manager, and tried to rebuild...or something like that. No Spurs necessary; we know what team we're talking about by now!
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
beyond the quarter finals of the FA Cup in the 30s
> beyond the quarterfinals of the FA Cup in the 30s...one word
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
travel long distance for the matches drawn up by the Football League, and decided to run their own competitions
> no comma required
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- The spurs way
terrible state of the White Hart Lane pitch,
> Ditto.
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
It was the best ever start by any club in the top flight of English football, until it was
> It was to be the best start by any club in the top flight of English football until it was
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- The double
the final of the 1960–61 FA Cup
extraneous space
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- 1st Euro triumph
Rotterdam, Spurs won 5–1, including
ditto
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Continuing success
Steve Perryman would become Spurs' longest serving player
hyphenate "longest serving"
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Decline and revival
Tottenham managed to reached four cup finals
> reach
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Relegation
70s cup-winning team had by now left or retired
Again, cap for Cup?
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
A memorable game early in the season came at home to Bristol Rovers, when Spurs won 9–0
, no comma req.
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Cup wins
a new phase of redevelopment of White Hart Lane
> choice of: a new phase of the redevelopment of White Hart Lane / a new phase of redeveloping White Hart Lane / a new phase of redevelopment at White Hart Lane.
- Done. Last option used. Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Cup and boardroom drama
Spurs managed a nine game unbeaten start
, hyphenate "nine-game"
Done.Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)- Undo this as it is the title of a news article. Hzh (talk) 11:52, 11 December 2018 (UTC)
who had little knowledge of the club's history (alleged to have said...
> who had little knowledge of the club's history (and was alleged to have asked}}...or something Incidentally. does "double" have to be capitalised? I wouldn't have thought so, important as it is to Spurs fans :)
- Done. As for "Double", I have no opinion one way or another, most sources appear to capitalise it, but if Wikipedia editors prefer it uncapitalised, then it can be done that way. What's the general opinion here? Hzh (talk) 17:48, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
but then reverted on appeal
Think you mean, "reversed on appeal"
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:58, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Premier league
as replacement for the
> to replace the
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:58, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ardiles
after Sheringhham was injured
Of all the names for you to mis-spell!
- Ooops, I actually have a tendency to use 2 Rs for his name, not 2 Hs! Corrected. Hzh (talk) 17:58, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
in June 1994 the club was found found guilty of making
It was only found once
- Done. Hzh (talk) 17:58, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Hope this helps. Nice article. ——SerialNumber54129 13:51, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- Many thanks for pointing out the errors, I have a tendency not to see my own mistakes. Much appreciated. Hzh (talk) 17:58, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- I appear to have made some errors saving the edits, but I hope they have all been fixed now. Hzh (talk) 19:11, 10 December 2018 (UTC)
- @Serial Number 54129: are you happy that all actionable issues have been actioned? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:47, 21 December 2018 (UTC)
- @Casliber: Indeed; I see the
however
issue was brought up below, but that its usage has been reduced to nearly single-figures. Everything else has also been addressed. Up the Irons! :p D Supporting this candidature. ——SerialNumber54129 12:56, 21 December 2018 (UTC)
- @Casliber: Indeed; I see the
- @Serial Number 54129: are you happy that all actionable issues have been actioned? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:47, 21 December 2018 (UTC)
Overuse of "however"
[edit]Even by Wikipedia practices, 26 uses of "however" is far too many. Use it only where needed to show contrast, and not as just another conjunction. Consider using "but", or recasting the sentence to use "although". Eric Corbett has some good advice and links here and here. Kablammo (talk) 14:53, 14 December 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks for the links. I have removed/reworded some of them, and will go over the article again to see how I can write the others better. Hzh (talk) 19:38, 14 December 2018 (UTC)
Image review
- Suggest scaling up the goal differences and table positions charts
- I've made them somewhat larger, but I'm not sure making them any bigger would look good. Hzh (talk) 00:55, 22 December 2018 (UTC)
- File:Tottenham_hotspur_1901.jpg: per the tag, should specify steps taken to try to ascertain authorship. When/where was this first published?
- Authorship wasn't clear as no copyright information was present in the 1901 match day booklet, Govvy (talk) 20:10, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- I'm not sure if you confused it with the other image, but this one was published in 1921 in the book A Romance of Football - The History of the Tottenham Hotspur F.C. 1882-1921. I've added that information for the image file. Hzh (talk) 22:29, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- I've found the author of this photograph, and as his date of death appears to be in 1953, the copyright would not expire until 2024 in the UK. It therefore cannot stay in Wikimedia Commons, I will move this into English Wikipedia (it is OK there as it is public domain in the US). Hzh (talk) 13:44, 21 December 2018 (UTC)
- File moved to English Wikipedia. Hzh (talk) 20:08, 21 December 2018 (UTC)
- Authorship wasn't clear as no copyright information was present in the 1901 match day booklet, Govvy (talk) 20:10, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- File:Facupfinal1901-D.jpg: source link is dead, need more info on steps taken to try to ascertain authorship
- Will look into this. Hzh (talk) 22:29, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- I haven't found the author for this photograph yet despite looking into a number of books and a few other sources. I guess we may consider that its author "cannot be ascertained by reasonable enquiry", but I will keep looking for a bit longer yet (one of the publications where it might have been published is not yet completely digitised, so it is hard to tell if it is there). Hzh (talk) 13:44, 21 December 2018 (UTC)
- Decided to use only one image for the season, and removed in favour of a group photo. Hzh (talk) 11:45, 28 December 2018 (UTC)
- File:TottenhamHotspurFC_League_Performance.svg needs a source for the data presented. Same with File:Tottenham_Hotspurs_F.C_Cumulative_Goal_Difference_1992_to_Oct_09.png
- The data can be found in here and here. I will add them to the article. Hzh (talk) 22:29, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- File:West_stand_of_White_Hart_Lane_in_1909.jpg: when/where was this first published?
- Unfortunately the source does not state where it was published apart from the date which was 1909. It should be public domain in the US as it was published before 1923, I can remove this image while I look further into this. Hzh (talk) 22:29, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- Again, haven't found much about this image, but will continue looking. I noticed a discrepancy in the date by looking at the stadium closely (the photograph is likely to have been taken in 1910 or later since it has a cockerel which was placed on top of the stand in 1910), so I won't use it until it has been resolved. Hzh (talk) 13:44, 21 December 2018 (UTC)
- File:Spurs_team_with_the_Cup_Winners'_Cup_trophy_1963.jpg: not seeing that licensing at the given source? Same with File:Ajax_vs_Spurs_1981_European_Cup_Winners'_Cup.jpg
- The Ajax Spurs image and 1963 trophy, licensing is CC0 1.0 Universeel (CC0 1.0) Publiek Domein Verklaring Govvy (talk) 20:00, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
Also seeing a number of ref errors that should be sorted before someone does a source review. Nikkimaria (talk) 19:43, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- I have found a couple of things, but couldn't see anything else - can you be more specific? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:13, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- Not doing a full source review at this point, but quickly: some footnotes don't link to Bibliography entries, some Bibliography entries aren't linked from footnotes, some inconsistencies in italicization (see for example BBC Sport), most web sources use cite templates but a couple don't, etc. Nikkimaria (talk) 21:51, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks for pointing out the issues that need fixing. I've dealt with some of those, and will go through the article again to see if there are any more. Hzh (talk) 23:18, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
- Not doing a full source review at this point, but quickly: some footnotes don't link to Bibliography entries, some Bibliography entries aren't linked from footnotes, some inconsistencies in italicization (see for example BBC Sport), most web sources use cite templates but a couple don't, etc. Nikkimaria (talk) 21:51, 15 December 2018 (UTC)
Comments from Dweller
[edit]This is essentially a great article. Maybe a local map with annotations would help, if you can find someone to do it.
I've started some copyediting. There is a lot, and I mean a lot of curious use of English. Most objectionable is the repeated use of the word "would" instead of the ordinary perfect tense, or sometimes future tense. I fixed a bunch, but when I saw there were roughly 50 more occurrences, I thought the team that wrote the article really ought to fix this. Please ping me when done. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 10:25, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ok I have gotten it down to 9 "would"s, almost all of which I think are appropriate use to make smoothest language Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:57, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- The goal difference chart is an interesting addition. But I'm not sure what it's trying to say that the league position chart doesn't. As the text doesn't seem to refer to it, and it's already 9 years out of date, I'd consider updating it and explaining it significance somehow, or removing it. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 10:32, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- You are right, I will remove that. Hzh (talk) 17:01, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- Just a note that although I thought the chart is unnecessary and out of date, if anyone wants to update an use the chart in the article, they can. Hzh (talk) 11:45, 28 December 2018 (UTC)
- You are right, I will remove that. Hzh (talk) 17:01, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- Some WP:RECENTISM issues. Nine paragraphs on the most successful period in the club's history (1958-1974, 16 years), 1 parag for every 2 years, 11 major trophies I counted on the main club page. most recent period (1992-2018) 23 paragraphs on the 26 years, 1 parag for every year, 2 major trophies. Should be the other way round. Expand the earlier period and trim the excessive recent detail. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 12:58, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- I do agree to some extent that there is a bit of RECENTISM, but not all of it. There have been 13 managers from 1993 to 2018 (25 years), compared to 18 in the previous 100 years. The higher turnover of manager means that more needs be written to cover the period properly. I think a couple of paragraphs could be removed in the 1992-2018 period, and a paragraph could be added in the 1958-1974 period. I will do that later. Hzh (talk) 17:01, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- Good response, thanks --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 17:07, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- I do agree to some extent that there is a bit of RECENTISM, but not all of it. There have been 13 managers from 1993 to 2018 (25 years), compared to 18 in the previous 100 years. The higher turnover of manager means that more needs be written to cover the period properly. I think a couple of paragraphs could be removed in the 1992-2018 period, and a paragraph could be added in the 1958-1974 period. I will do that later. Hzh (talk) 17:01, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- The box about the quote misallocated to Burkinshaw is utterly bewildering and comes across as somewhere between smartarsery and original research --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 14:56, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- I will think about how to reword it, or whether to remove it altogether. I added it because it is often quoted to indicate a change in football in the 1980s, but it might not be necessary. Hzh (talk) 17:01, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- OK. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 17:07, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- It has been removed. That quote was frequently used to indicate a sense of regret and nostalgia before football clubs became commercial enterprises - before that clubs were often owned by wealthy local individuals (or families for clubs such as Tottenham whose shares were handed down through generations) who treated the clubs with benevolence, but it is too much having to give a long explanation for such a short quote. Hzh (talk) 11:45, 28 December 2018 (UTC)
- OK. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 17:07, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- I will think about how to reword it, or whether to remove it altogether. I added it because it is often quoted to indicate a change in football in the 1980s, but it might not be necessary. Hzh (talk) 17:01, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
Note to FAC team: there's a lot of work going on with the article at the moment. Inactivity here isn't inactivity. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 11:17, 28 December 2018 (UTC)
Nominators, please look out for detail that falls between excessive and insufficient with regard to players. For example, this paragraph:
Soon after the club became a limited company, on 14 March 1898, Frank Brettell was appointed the first manager of Spurs.[33] Bretell signed a number of players from northern clubs, such as Harry Erentz, Tom Smith, Harry Bradshaw, James McNaught, and in particular John Cameron, who signed from Everton in May 1898 and was to have a considerable role in the history of the club. Cameron became player-manager the following February, after Bretell left to take a better-paid position at Portsmouth, and led the club to its first trophies, the Southern League title in 1899-1900 and the 1901 FA Cup. In his first year as manager, he signed seven players: George Clawley, Ted Hughes, David Copeland, Tom Morris, Jack Kirwan, Sandy Tait and Tom Pratt. In the following year Sandy Brown replaced Pratt who wanted to return to the North despite being the top goalscorer. They, together with Cameron, Erentz, Smith and Jones, formed the 1901 Cup-winning team.[34]
...names 12 or 13 players (never been very good at maths), but only refers to the importance of four or five of them. So why mention the others by name? In an article about the history of a club that's well over 100 years old, surely you should only mention the really very important players - and in every case where you do, the reader will want to know why they merit mention. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 16:55, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Another example. I remember Pauls Stewart and Walsh very well, but their inclusion in the article is fairly baffling. Why them and not Nayim (or even Vinny
SidewaysSamways)? --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 16:59, 3 January 2019 (UTC)- Ok, I need @Hzh:'s input here, but one can only put in what the sources say, and if Goodwin has identified that (his or whosever) common thinking was that Fenwick and Walsh were the pivotal signings that were supposed to (and failed) to lift the club then that's who gets mentioned I guess. I do agree that it is better to as much as possible include some sort of reason as to why a person is included. However there are times when it is unavoidable (but should be minimised as much as possible) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:22, 5 January 2019 (UTC)
- My feeling is that the first Cup winning team need to be mentioned in full, but if others feel that some can be removed, then do so. As for the others, it's about how to fit them into the narrative. For example, Nayim first came on loan to Spurs, but later became part of the deal to bring Gary Lineker to the club, it's whether he is significant enough to warrant a special mention on how he came to the club, which I don't think he is. Same for Vinny Samways. Fenwick and Walsh are included because they fit into the narrative. Paul Stewart was at that time a big signing, so he was mentioned. Others, however, may have a different opinion, and I don't really object if anyone feels that names need to be removed or added. Hzh (talk) 22:27, 5 January 2019 (UTC)
- I've removed two of the names from the quote given above so that only members of the Cup-winning team are left. Hzh (talk) 18:17, 6 January 2019 (UTC)
- My feeling is that the first Cup winning team need to be mentioned in full, but if others feel that some can be removed, then do so. As for the others, it's about how to fit them into the narrative. For example, Nayim first came on loan to Spurs, but later became part of the deal to bring Gary Lineker to the club, it's whether he is significant enough to warrant a special mention on how he came to the club, which I don't think he is. Same for Vinny Samways. Fenwick and Walsh are included because they fit into the narrative. Paul Stewart was at that time a big signing, so he was mentioned. Others, however, may have a different opinion, and I don't really object if anyone feels that names need to be removed or added. Hzh (talk) 22:27, 5 January 2019 (UTC)
- I should add I have no problem with listing lots of players from the early 1950s or early 1960s sides as they were the peak years and (I guess) th whole team contributed. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:16, 5 January 2019 (UTC)
- Ok, I need @Hzh:'s input here, but one can only put in what the sources say, and if Goodwin has identified that (his or whosever) common thinking was that Fenwick and Walsh were the pivotal signings that were supposed to (and failed) to lift the club then that's who gets mentioned I guess. I do agree that it is better to as much as possible include some sort of reason as to why a person is included. However there are times when it is unavoidable (but should be minimised as much as possible) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:22, 5 January 2019 (UTC)
There are still lots of named players littering the article in all eras, whose supreme importance is not asserted. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 22:26, 6 January 2019 (UTC)
- It will take a bit of time to write more on individual players, but I will try to do that the next couple of days. I'm not sure they could be said to be of supreme importance (there are really only a few who could be said to be of supreme importance), but most of them were certainly players important enough to be worth mentioning. I'll see if there is anyone who can be removed. Hzh (talk) 02:07, 8 January 2019 (UTC)
Given that the rivalry with Arsenal is so important to Spurs, relegating the genesis of the rivalry to an aside in brackets feels insubstantial. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 22:26, 6 January 2019 (UTC)
- It is covered in greater detail in North London derby and even on the Tottenham Hotspur F.C. page (which is, incidentally, much smaller than this one and has more room to be expanded). Some material such as supporters and rivalries could be interpreted as being a bit 'meta' to the chronological flow of the club's fortunes and hence may be better covered in the parent page rather than the history page Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:19, 8 January 2019 (UTC)
Possibly unfair and poorly timed comment: I'm just not active enough (watch my next edit) at the moment to do this justice. It's a huge and high quality piece of work but I have strong reservations about the quality of the prose. In places, it looks like it's been written by someone for whom English is a second language, something I've alluded to in a number of edit summaries as I've been slowly copy-editing. I cannot commit to finishing the job and I feel I'm slowing down this process. So here's my thought. Support, entirely conditional on detailed third-party copyedit. Without one, I'm actually really close to oppose (and if I'm true to myself, I would oppose on those grounds if it weren't that Cas was involved, to whom I owe a great deal, and merely offering conditional support grieves me). --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 10:51, 11 January 2019 (UTC)
- That's a fair call (I respect people being thorough and honest) - there is a huge amount of text in the article and each reviewer has found some basic grammar issues as well as the usual prose-smoothing. I'll ask around. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:59, 11 January 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks. Here are my comments on the article. You might find it useful for the comments about English and for how far I got. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 13:36, 11 January 2019 (UTC)
- @Dweller: it's had a run through by an independent copyeditor. Do you feel it flows better? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:00, 18 January 2019 (UTC)
- There are few editors around who are better writers than Eric Corbett. Unconditional Support --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 09:09, 20 January 2019 (UTC)
- thanks/much appreciated. I think the cosmos rebalanced itself as his team beat Spurs 1-0 last week....sigh Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:54, 20 January 2019 (UTC)
- That's a fair call (I respect people being thorough and honest) - there is a huge amount of text in the article and each reviewer has found some basic grammar issues as well as the usual prose-smoothing. I'll ask around. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:59, 11 January 2019 (UTC)
Sources review
[edit]- I have checked through the first half of the references. There are several instances where I am not convinced that the source meets the required criteria for quality and reliability. Would you care to comment on the following?
- Ref 3 and others: Hotspur HQ
- All replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 11: Save the Red House
- Replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:57, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 13: Aford Awards
- Replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 61: A Halftime Report
- Replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 66: The Fighting Cock
- Replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 132: Who Ate All The Pies
- Replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 143:
- Replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- some can definitely be replaced by book refs. Will look more later as RL beckons... Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:34, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
- I can make a start replacing the references a bit later. Most are easily replaceable, there might be one or two that are difficult to replace, but we can deal with that later if nothing else can be found. Hzh (talk) 22:41, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
- Took a while to find other sources for the information in Save the Red House, but all have been fixed now. Hzh (talk) 15:57, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- I can make a start replacing the references a bit later. Most are easily replaceable, there might be one or two that are difficult to replace, but we can deal with that later if nothing else can be found. Hzh (talk) 22:41, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
- some can definitely be replaced by book refs. Will look more later as RL beckons... Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:34, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
- In addition there are a few minor glitches
- Ref 22 Harvard error
- Fixed. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 46 Source wrongly stated as Spurs HQ
- Replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 133 Chapter reference missing
- Fixed. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 150 Harvard error (Source given as "Goodman")
- Fixed. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
Note: ref numbers are as at the date of this post. A report on the second half will follow presently. Brianboulton (talk) 20:58, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
Continuing - second column:
- More sources that I would like you to comment on in terms of quality/reliability:
- Ref 168: HITC
- Replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 187: Football Site
- Replaced. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 208: FourFourTwo
- This is FourFourTwo, which is a notable football magazine Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:50, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 225: football.london
- replaced that one Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:07, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 274: Goal
- This is Goal (website). Would seem to be reliable (writers/size etc.) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:14, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Other points
- Ref 177: publisher details and date missing
- Fixed. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 178: publisher details missing
- Fixed. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 180: publication date missing
- Fixed. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 198: publisher details missing
- Fixed. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Ref 270: publisher details missing
- Fixed. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Bibliography: there are no citations to the Hunter Davies book
- Fixed. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
- Dead links
- According to the external link checking tool the following are dead links: Refs 106, 151, 159 (numbers correct at time of this posting)
- Ref 106 replaced as it appears to be permanently dead. Ref 151 fixed. Red 159 seemed OK, but I added its archived link anyway. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
Subject to the above, this looks like a comprehensively sourced article with over 300 citations, mostly to sources of appropriate quality and reliability.Brianboulton (talk) 22:17, 29 December 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for taking the time to check the sources. Much appreciated. If you notice anything else do let us know. Hzh (talk) 15:12, 30 December 2018 (UTC)
Comments from Tim riley
[edit]A few thoughts from a quick canter through:
- Date ranges
- e.g. In the 1921–22 season – the MoS, Heaven knows why, now bids us spell out date ranges, e.g. 1921–1922 season, God save us!
- need to look at/think about this - seems really counterintuitive Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:15, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Counterintuitive as in "bloody silly", but heigh ho! Tim riley talk 20:34, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- need to look at/think about this - seems really counterintuitive Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:15, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Lead
- There is some confusion of singular-v-plural. We start off singular for the first three sentences and then switch, unannounced, to plural in the fourth.
- singularised now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:34, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Early decades in the Football League (1908–1949)
- "The rivalry begun six years earlier" – "began", I think you mean
- fixed now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:34, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Highs and lows of the interwar years
- The MoS discourages use of definite articles within headers
- trimmed now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:35, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- War and post-war lull
- The OED prescribes a hyphen in "semi-final".
- added now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:36, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Villas-Boas and Sherwood
- "former Swansea City loanee" – this needs a bit of work. The OED defines "loanee" as "One to whom a loan has been granted; a borrower", which I don’t think you mean here. Also it is not clear whether Sigurðsson was lent to or by Swansea. I pass over the clunky false title. A sports article is perhaps OK with such tabloidese.
- leave it like this as that is where he was physically just before and where he attracted the attention of the two clubs (Liverpool and Spurs) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:14, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
I hope these few quick points are of use. Tim riley (Everton F.C.) talk 19:05, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Indeed they are/thx Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:14, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
Tim riley, BrEng has a weird pluralisation for football teams. When I've worked on FACs on football before, I've dealt with the corporate body club in the singular ("Norwich City is the best club in Anglia") and the team in the plural ("Norwich City are the best team in Anglia"). But pretty much whatever you do looks wrong to someone. What's important is consistency. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 20:17, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- I think you're right: personally I'd pluralise the lot, but it's a matter of personal preference, and consistency is really the most important thing. Tim riley talk 20:31, 3 January 2019 (UTC)
- Yes, a headache whichever way. At least is consistently singular or have ducked it a bit. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:04, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
- If we stick to singular for the club and plural for team, it would be consistent. Using plural for the team is standard in British English, not doing it would be even more confusing to British readers. It is also common to use singular for the club (an example from a news article
...the club is very well run...
- [4], note also the use of plural inTranmere are...
) Using singular or plural in a sentence simply signals to the readers what is being referred to in that sentence. The only confusion that may arise (for non-BrEng speakers) is when plural is used for the club, which is possible in British English for football club. Hzh (talk) 12:14, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
- If we stick to singular for the club and plural for team, it would be consistent. Using plural for the team is standard in British English, not doing it would be even more confusing to British readers. It is also common to use singular for the club (an example from a news article
- Yes, a headache whichever way. At least is consistently singular or have ducked it a bit. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:04, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
- Hey @Tim Riley: can you see anything else actionable to improve? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:33, 19 January 2019 (UTC)
Coordinator note: Fixing the ping for Tim riley. Sarastro (talk) 23:19, 20 January 2019 (UTC)
- I'm happy with the article, which, as far as I can see meets the FA criteria. At 11,500 words it's on the long side, but I didn't detect any waffling or digression. Some topics seem to attract voluminous prose (Bollywood, anyone?) and perhaps readers most likely to read them prefer it so. Happy to support despite the length. Tim riley talk 18:21, 22 January 2019 (UTC)
- Thx/much appreciated! Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:49, 22 January 2019 (UTC)
Comments from Kosack
[edit]Resolved comments from Kosack
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Casliber has asked me to take a look at this one. My initial comments on a run through: Lead
Formation
Early years
Professional status
Move to White Hart Lane
1901 FA Cup
Election to the Football League
Interwar years
War and post-war lull
League title
Post-Rowe
Bill Nicholson and the Glory Years (1958–1974)
The Double
Continuing success
Decline and revival under Keith Burkinshaw (1974–1984)
Relegation
Cup wins and European success
Shreeves and Pleat (1984–1987)
Cup win and boardroom drama
Beginning of Premier League football (1992–2004)
Ardiles, Francis and Gross
New ownership and Glenn Hoddle
Villas-Boas and Sherwood
A new era under Pochettino (2014–present)
New stadium
References
I'm not an experienced FA reviewer but I have experience reviewing GAs and I would raise all of the points above in a normal GA review. As such, I would assume they would be worth dealing with at FA level. There is a minor but consistent WP:OVERLINK issue throughout but that's not hard to deal with. There is also some inconsistency in position wording, for example both fifth and 5th are used in the article, although I'm unsure of how important that is so I'll leave it up to others to raise if necessary. Happy to take any constructive criticism of my review if its not up to scratch though. Kosack (talk) 22:33, 6 January 2019 (UTC)
Follow up[edit]I've had another run through today and found a few more issues to look at. Early years
1901 FA Cup
War and post-war lull
The Spurs Way
Bill Nicholson and the glory years (1958–1974)
Cup wins and European success
Shreeves and Pleat (1984–1987)
Beginning of Premier League football (1992–2004)
Resurgence and the Champions League (2004–2014)
Harry Redknapp
That'll probably be all from me on this one. Kosack (talk) 22:06, 8 January 2019 (UTC)
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- Support - I'm happy that all of the issues I and others raised here have been addressed. The article is well written and detailed. I would support promotion. Kosack (talk) 09:00, 9 January 2019 (UTC)
- thanks for the thorough working-over. I hope it makes you feel more confident to nominate your one again. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 09:24, 9 January 2019 (UTC)
Comments – I've read part of the way through the article and have a couple of (minor) thoughts so far, not counting ones that were mentioned above:
"and also the UEFA Cup Winners' Cup." Remove "also", as that is just an extra word that adds nothing to the lead.
- removed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 01:27, 9 January 2019 (UTC)
Election to the Football League: This usage of the word "Fortuitously" could be perceived as POV. To save it, you could try adding "for the club" or similar after it, to imply that it wasn't fortunate in general (it certainly doesn't seem fortunate for Stoke).Giants2008 (Talk) 23:46, 8 January 2019 (UTC)
- good point/tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 01:27, 9 January 2019 (UTC)
First European triumph: A word is missing in "A month later Spurs won their consecutive FA Cup...".
- tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:24, 11 January 2019 (UTC)
Terry Venables (1987–1993): This is quite repetitive around the comma: "and new signings by Venables Terry Fenwick and Paul Walsh failed to lift the team, the team only managing...".
- tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:24, 11 January 2019 (UTC)
"the" is needed before "opening game" in the following paragraph.
- tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:24, 11 January 2019 (UTC)
"There were second from bottom...". Was "There" supposed to be "They"?Giants2008 (Talk) 02:48, 11 January 2019 (UTC)
- tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:24, 11 January 2019 (UTC)
- good point/tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 01:27, 9 January 2019 (UTC)
- @Giants2008: do you have any more to add? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:02, 18 January 2019 (UTC)
Coordinator comment: I'm a little concerned that we are heading towards this FAC being open for 6 weeks, and we have a lot of text here but still no real consensus that it meets the FA criteria. I'm going to add this to the urgent list, but I'm a little concerned that the wall of text might put off any new reviewers. It might be worth the nominators pinging those who have commented earlier to see if they have anything further to add, or this could be in danger of archiving. Sarastro (talk) 23:29, 17 January 2019 (UTC)
- Yes it has gone quiet. Am pinging now. Dweller posted that he wanted an independent copyedit (which has occurred) and gave a (sort of) support if this had occurred. (He also doesn't edit much on weekends so might not be till Monday till he posts) Other comments look promising but I agree we need to sort this out. Have pinged. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:02, 18 January 2019 (UTC)
- Support – I gave some comments before, but had refrained from supporting because, like others, I wasn't thrilled with the state of the prose in general. It had tended to be on the wordy side, with some overly long sentences that were trying to say too much for their own good and the large amount of passive voice noted by Dweller above. While he may describe his own comment as "possibly unfair", I believe it was perfectly reasonable to state that a general copy-edit was needed for the article to meet FA standards, as I had similar feelings. Well, after the third-party copy-edit this now reads like an entirely different, much stronger article. Thanks to that good work, I now believe this meets the FA criteria. Giants2008 (Talk) 22:53, 19 January 2019 (UTC)
- thanks for that. I figured something like that was up and am relieved. I have not been on the nominating end of a football article before so a steep learning curve for us Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:54, 20 January 2019 (UTC)
Closing comment: I think there is enough support and commentary for promotion now. I'd just like to add to the praise for the copy edit that pushed us over the line by Eric Corbett. One final point for the nominators to consider after promotion: the duplinks need to be checked as we seem to have quite a few, although some may be justified by the length of the article. This tool will highlight any duplication, and I leave it to the main editors to decide which need to be kept. Sarastro (talk) 23:10, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
- Closing note: This candidate has been promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Sarastro (talk) 23:10, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
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