Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of Ed, Edd n Eddy episodes/archive2
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The list was not promoted by The Rambling Man 19:42, 5 June 2012 [1].
List of Ed, Edd n Eddy episodes[edit]
List of Ed, Edd n Eddy episodes (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)
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- Nominator(s): Khanassassin ☪ 16:07, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I am nominating this for featured list because, after all the hard work, the list is finally ready. Khanassassin ☪ 16:07, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
- Is Cartoon Network the US one or the Canadian one? If US, is there a reason why it premiered there before the country it was produced?
- Don't start a sentence with "However". Semi-colon works here
- 'On April 6, 2012, the series received another ability to air re-runs on the revived block "Cartoon Planet."' is this on Cartoon Network? Put the full stop outside the quotes, the series doesn't have the ability to air reruns. It's not a physical thing. The network has the ability to air reruns, but why? Is this syndication or something else?
- "in which the Eds would appear" is "Eds" the correct spelling?
- "apart from their regular series airings." Apart is probably the wrong word here, unless they appeared in other series
- "who hang around" -- is too colloquial
- "make money off their peers" -- "take" and "from" perhaps?
- Not sure why the article uses US spellings for a Canadian show (favorite)
- "However, their plans usually fail," -- starts with However
- "With a viewership of 31 million households and aired in 29 different countries," -- poor grammar
- "amongst" is chiefly a Commonwealth word, whereas "among" is American, so this conflicts with "Favorite"
- "longest running" hyphenate
- "It is considered to be one of Cartoon Network's best works." by whom?
- "He resolved, however, to ensure" no need for however
- "in a way" unnecessary
- "Antonucci spent months designing the show, before trying to sell it to Nickelodeon and Cartoon Network." no need for comma
- "however they each" --> but
- "A deal was ultimately made for Cartoon Network to commission the show, after they agreed to let Antonucci go in his own direction." remove comma
- "Antonucci is a strong advocate of hand-drawn animation." unsourced
- "The wobbling animation in Ed, Edd n Eddy is an homage to the hand-drawn cartoons with a style that harkens back to cartoons of the 1930s to the 1950s." -- previous paragraph said 1940s t0 1970s. And it's either "harks back" or "harkens" without the "back", but note this is a chiefly US term
- "Ed, Edd n Eddy uses shimmering character outlines similar to Squigglevision;[2]" describe what Squigglevision is, so readers don't navigate away from the article
- "The crawling lines are not nearly as active as those in Dr. Katz, Professional Therapist, but are still visible,[2] and Antonucci likens it to cartoons of the 1930s." -- Assumes the reader is familiar with Dr. Katz, capital T follows a comma, "likens it" refers to something similar, but "lines" is plural
- "According to
DannyAntonucci," - "The Three Stooges,
who werea comedy trio" - "whose various characters they portrayed in each short subject film often try to create money-making schemes, but their plans end up backfiring near the end of their films." --> "whose characters often try to create money-making schemes, which end up backfiring towards the end of the films."
- "The cul-de-sac children and the Kanker sisters were all based on children he grew up with." --> state who "he" is
- "Antonucci also stated that he believed it was important to add Plank, a board of wood, to the show, stating that he "thought it would be really cool to do the show with Plank taking on a character of his own" and to cause Jonny to do things he would usually never do." --- "stated that he believed ... stating that he thought" is too repetitive. Who is Jonny? He hasn't been mentioned until now.
- "The series' finale movie, Ed, Edd n Eddy's Big Picture Show aired on November 8, 2009, officially ending the series." -- were there other movies? Was there an unofficial ending? If no, lose the apostrophe and change "movie" to "a television film", and change "officially ending" to "which ended"
- "However, reruns continued to air on the network until July 1, 2011." -- However starts a sentence
- "the series received another opportunity to air re-runs" --> "the network (state which) started to air reruns"
- "Ed Edd and Eddy were voiced" + the rest... change "were" to "are"
- "Ed Edd and Eddy were voiced by Matt Hill, Samuel Vincent and Tony Sampson." who did which?
- Jonny (referred to in the credits as "Jonny 2x4") was voiced by David Paul Grove, Rolf was voiced by Peter Kelamis, Jimmy by Keenan Christenson, Sarah by Janyse Jaud, Kevin by Kathleen Barr, and Nazz by Tabitha St. Germain in season 1, Jenn Forgie in season 3 and Erin Fitzgerald in season 2, 4, 5 and 6. May is voiced by Erin Fitzgerald, who also voices Nazz in seasons 2, 4, 5 and 6, except for season 3, when she was voiced by Jenn Forgie, who also voices Nazz in season 3." --- sentence is waaaaaayy tooooo looooonnnnngg. Some of the commas should be semicolons. Why does the reader need telling that Erin voices Nazz in seasons 2, 4, 5 and 6 twice? And why does the reader need telling that Jennie voices Nazz three times??
- "Marie is voiced by Kathleen Barr, who also Kevin, and Lee is voiced by Janyse Jaud, who also voices Sarah." -- "what does "who also Kevin" mean? I can assume, but since you've already told us in the previous sentence, you don't need to say it again. We also don't need telling a second time that Janyse voices Sarah twice
- "Eddy's brother is mentioned frequently throughout the series, however, he does not appear in the series until the debut of Ed, Edd n Eddy's Big Picture Show, where he is voiced by Terry Klassen." -- "change "however" to "but". But seriously, why in a main cast list for the series are you telling us who voiced a character that appears once in one episode?
- "With a viewership of 31 million households and aired in 29 different countries," poor grammar. 31m households where? Worldwide, the US?
- "Ed, Edd n Eddy was popular amongst kids, as well as adults." -- "kids" is too colloquial. "Amongst" again. Choose the language for the article. "...amongst both children and adults" sounds a lot better
- "Receiving several of awards and nominations, it remains" -- grammar
- "It is considered to be one of Cartoon Network's best works." by whom?
- That entire paragraph sounds extremely similar to the one in the Lede. A Lede is supposed to summarize the prose in the body of the article, not be the same
- "Terrence Briggs of Animation World Magazine argued that every second of the show is "filler" and that the main characters are drawn as "products from the school of acid-trip caricature."" doesn't sound like a generally positive review
- "pile up" -- colloquial
- For a six-season show, can you only find three reviews from two sources?
- Series overview table does not meet WP:DTT
- Series overview table uses colour that does not coincide with WP:DEVIATIONS
- Series overview table states that the specials are a season
- Series overview table states that the film is a season
- Have you got production codes and viewing figures for each episode to include in the tables?
- The season 6 article is too small to require splitting from this list. Also, there's no reference anywhere to show that this one episode is actually a season, and not a special or an episode delayed from season 5.
- All content in a Featured list should be featured, which means anything transcluded should be featured too.
Oppose This article is so not ready. It needs a major copy edit and peer review. Matthewedwards (talk · contribs) 04:19, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
- See List of Family Guy episodes, that is a featured list
- Remove the unneeded infobox from the side
- Per above. Oppose. TBrandley • talk • contributions 14:47, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Might I add, List of Family Guy episode articles was actually my "model article."
Comment looks like this has descended into peer review territory already. Suggest the nominator withdraws this, works on the many good points that Matthew has raised, take it to PR and then bring it back here once it's polished up a bit. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:07, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Deal, I withdraw this list and will bring it back once it's polished up. :) --Khanassassin ☪ 19:36, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks Khanassassin, good luck and look forward to seeing you back here. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:37, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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