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- Refs 1, 2, 3, 5, 6: The lead relies heavily on these ANN sources which are not a reliable source. The encyclopedic section of ANN is editable by anybody so only the news/releases/reviews sections can be considered reliable.
- I've switched them up. I don't have citations for the theme songs, but I can cite the episodes themselves if you wish. NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 18:28, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Okay, but this has left some things uncited. For example "initially aired on WOWOW in 1998 and 1999" Rambo's Revenge (talk) 23:09, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I may have missed them, but "Adventures of Mini-Goddess", "Ah! My Goddess: Fighting Wings" and the "OVA series" airdates are uncited.
- Refs added. They're not from the official sites, but of course, official websites didn't exist in 1993. They are reliable as the information page of Allcinema.net cites them as being a company; not a fansite. NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 18:28, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- For the OVA series the ref added only cites the first date, not the other three. For Adventures of Mini-Goddess it only seems to cite the month range of the series, not all the individual air dates. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 23:09, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Other minor fixes
==Notes== should be ==Note==
- WP:OVERLINKING e.g. Anime International Company, Tokyo Broadcasting System etc. in the lead
- I can unlink the entire page, but I still feel that each section should link to those pages individually as viewers may skip sections when reading the page. I've unlinked the lead, but that's all I've done so far. NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 18:28, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- What are your opinions on this? NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 03:21, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
OVA series ep. 3 | Per WP:DASH use spaced ndash or unspaced mdash. Not spaces mdash.
- I cannot find what you're talking about. NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 18:28, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for the catch. I need my eyes checked, heh. NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 22:51, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Rambo's Revenge (talk) 15:30, 20 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Sources
Ref 21 and 40: park2.wakwak.com/~mi-ke is not a reliable source. It is a fan site. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 10:45, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- It is a direct copy from official sites that are no longer on the internet. NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 19:07, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm sorry but you saying it is a direct copy of an offline reliable source doesn't hold. You would need to prove it. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 11:13, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Finally cited with definite reliable sources and clarified for airdates, and theme music ref replaced with episode citations. Don't know why I didn't see the refs for the airdates before... NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 20:51, 23 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 43 doesn't cite what it claims. It mentions no airdates.
- Column on the right should. It looks fine on my computer, so I don't know what's going on. NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 19:07, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- It is fine, I got a different page to that last time, buts have copied the url wrong or something. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 11:13, 22 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 22: The site ANIPO doesn't cite anthing. If you meant the video, you can't do that (copyvio).
- I think the Japanese messed with the linking... I had linked to a different site with the "ANIPO" logo in the upper left-hand corner, but the current linked site is a bit... different? I've changed the links. NOCTURNENOIR ( t • c ) 19:07, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Rambo's Revenge (talk) 10:45, 21 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- "The storyline initially parallels the early parts of the original manga and is similar to early episodes of the later 2005 TV series, but it soon moves off onto a tangent of its own" | more context, can you state what some of the parts it paralleled were, and how or to what it becomes
- I haven't read the manga, so I don't have a clue. I've clarified the connection to the other TV series though. ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ( t • c ) 22:31, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- ==Adventures of Mini-Goddess== has overlinking of "Pony Canyon" and "Geneon Entertainment"
- "It had
only two"
- Ref 36 & 37, the titles should not be all in capitals, even if the webpage is.
- "With Belldandy and Megumi off shopping, Keiichi decides watch a film that has mysteriously arrived in the mail", so did the Ultimate Force get broken somehow..?
- To tell the truth, I have no clue. It's an anime; they tend to have plot holes like this. They pretty much inexplicably go shopping, so this plot hole is not covered. ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ( t • c ) 22:31, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Um for the short prose section in ==Ah! My Goddess: Fighting Wings== it might be worth combining all three one sentence "paragraph" into one paragraph.
- They were separate paragraphs for the others. I've made it into two paragraphs. ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ( t • c ) 22:31, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- For the two Ah! My Goodness seasons, they both say "They are based on the manga series Oh My Goddess!," isn't that fairly obvious on an "Oh My Goddess!" episode page. I would suggest either expanding about what parts of the manga it covers or removing.
- There is more clarification the paragraphs elsewhere, so I've moved stuff around a bit and removed the unnecessary repetition. ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ( t • c ) 22:31, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Rambo's Revenge (talk) 22:05, 2 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
More
- Inconsistent naming: Links to List of Adventures of Mini-Goddess episodes and The Adventures of Mini-Goddess. Which one is it "Adventures of Mini-Goddess" or "The Adventures of Mini-Goddess". You might need to move some pages/create new redirects for this one.
- List of the OC episodes redirects to List of OC episodes, so I see no reason why List of Adventures of Mini-Goddess should be moved to "List of The Adventures of Mini-Goddess" (the proper title). ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ( t • c ) 15:16, 4 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Um no it doesn't. It redirects to List of The O.C. episodes. And regardess, you should be consistent within this list. e.g. It says "Adventures of Mini-Goddess" in the lead. But you claim the official title is The Adventures of Mini-Goddess. Then the section on it is called ==Adventures of Mini-Goddess== but you start that section with the name "The Adventures of Mini-Goddess". Rambo's Revenge (talk) 15:35, 4 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Hmm, musta been superbly tired when I wrote that, as I didn't utter a single proper sentence in that whole post. I have moved the list. ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ( t • c ) 20:07, 4 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- "However, the later episodes of the OVA, episodes four and five, do not follow the manga or any other TV series." | firstly OVA is a singular, so should be OVA series if it stays, but I think you can remove
the later episodes of the OVA completely as it is clear from the previous sentence what is being talked about.
- It was
also reissued twice
- "also known as Ah! My Goddess: Being Small is Convenient[citation needed]
- That's the literal translation from the original Japanese title. I've changed the wording to reflect this. I don't believe this still needs to be cited. ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ( t • c ) 15:16, 4 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- "It was directed by Hiroko Kazui and Yasuhiro Matsumura and
it was produced by Oriental Light and Magic"
- "It premiered as a part of the omnibus show Anime Complex on WOWOW and is distributed in North America by Geneon Entertainment, formerly known as Pioneer Entertainment." | these two things seem completely unrelated, split
- "A boxed set was released" | I'm guessing it is a DVD boxset from the year, but you have mentioned VHS previously so make explicit
- "the season was licensed to Geneon Entertainmen]," | typo
- "On January 6, 2005, the season aired in Japan on TBS and ended on July 7, 2005" | The season aired in Japan on TBS from ... to ...
- "Bandai Visual released the episodes in Japan between April and November 2005, as eight DVD compilations each containing three episodes" | repeatitive episodes, something like Bandai Visual released eight DVD compilations in Japan between April and November 2005, each containing three episodes
Stopped looking, I'm noticing a lot of prose that still needs tweaking. Suggest getting a copyeditor. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 10:43, 4 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- This list has already been copyedited by La Pianista (talk · contribs). Are you suggesting that I need yet another? Most of these prose concerns seem very nitpicky (aside from the typo). ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ( t • c ) 15:16, 4 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I disagree that most of my concerns were nitpicky. Stuff like slitting unrelated sentences, reducing redundancy and ambiguity are all valid concerns to meet criteria 1: "professional standards of writing". My only other concern is the image, I realise someone told you to add it at PR, but I don't think it passes WP:NFCC criteria 8 for inclusion - "only if its presence would significantly increase readers' understanding of the topic, and its omission would be detrimental to that understanding."
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