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Grammy Award for Best Disco Recording[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would love to receive some general feedback about the status of the article and what improvements should be made before I nominate the article for Good status. Should the reviewer have an opinion as to whether or not the article is GA-worthy or not, that feedback would be much appreciated. I included this in the Arts section since it is an entertainment award for music. The award was only presented once, so the article is short, but I think it has a unique background and I tried to incorporate as much information from various sources I could find about the subject. Thank you for taking the time to offer any suggestions or advice. --Another Believer (Talk) 16:10, 20 August 2010 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This is an interesting article. I don't think its shortness is a problem by itself, but perhaps it could be a bit more broad in coverage. Fads like hula hoops often come and go quietly, but this one seems to have ended with a bang. I wonder about Dahl's motives and the motives of the rioting mob. Were they expressing real anger or was it a case of a boring ball game and too much beer? It would also be nice to know what Dahl was thinking and what he said while burning the records. Was he hoping to start a riot? What motivated him? The various groups mentioned by Werner seem so different from one another, it's hard to imagine why they would all hate disco. What did they have in common? Why, for example, would feminists favor sexism, as Werner suggests? Some of these considerations may go beyond the scope of the article, but perhaps some of them could be worked in, at least briefly. Just a suggestion.
- No dead links, no dabs.
- Image licenses look fine. The Gloria Gaynor image was uploaded at 14 kb, but the image is available in a much larger size via the Flickr site. I'd think about downloading the largest possible one and uploading it to the Commons as an updated version of the 14 kb version.
Lead
- "The award category was discontinued before the 23rd Grammy Awards due to a backlash against disco." - Wikilink disco here on first use?
- Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 23:02, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
- "The award for Best Disco Recording went to Gloria Gaynor as well as producers Dino Fekaris and Freddie Perren for the song "I Will Survive". The award category was discontinued before the 23rd Grammy Awards due to a backlash against disco. A similar category, Best Dance Recording, began being awarded in 1998 to honor vocal or instrumental dance tracks, though there were concerns that the genre would be short-lived much like the disco category." - Usually active voice is punchier than passive. These two sentences could be flipped to active like this: "Gloria Gaynor and producers Dino Fekaris and Freddie Perren won the Best Disco Recording award for the song "I Will Survive". However, because of a backlash against disco, the academy discontinued the category before the 23rd Grammy Awards. In 1998, it began awards for a similar category, Best Dance Recording, to honor vocal or instrumental dance tracks, though there were concerns that the genre would be short-lived, much like the disco category."
- Actually, I really like a lot of that. Thank you for the suggestion--I will try to consider using an active voice more often. --Another Believer (Talk) 23:02, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
Background
- "On July 12, 1979, just a few months after Newsweek had reported on the "[take] over" of disco music, a promotional event known as Disco Demolition Night was held at Chicago's Comiskey Park during a doubleheader intermission, where disc jockey Steve Dahl set ablaze a bin full of disco records, causing a riot within the stadium and gaining international attention." - A bit too complex, perhaps. Would two sentences be better? Suggestion: "On July 12, 1979, just a few months after Newsweek had reported on the "[take] over" of disco music, a promotional event known as Disco Demolition Night was held at Chicago's Comiskey Park. During a doubleheader intermission, disc jockey Steve Dahl set ablaze a bin full of disco records, causing a riot within the stadium and gaining international attention."
- Perfect. Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 23:43, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
"According to author Craig Werner, the "anti-disco movement represented an unholy alliance of funkateers and feminists, progressives and puritans, rockers and reactionaries. None the less, the attacks on disco gave respectable voice to the ugliest kinds of unacknowledged racism, sexism and homophobia." - Since the quote is embedded in The Independent article, you are quoting The Independent rather than Werner and should add something like "According to author Craig Werner, as quoted in the British newspaper The Independent,... " Would it be better to quote Werner directly? Does he say anything else about the rise and fall of disco in his book?
- I updated the sentence to include The Independent, as suggested. --Another Believer (Talk) 23:43, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
Award
- In 1979, the National Academy of Recording Arts and Sciences decided to add the category for the 22nd Grammy Awards, just as disco was "preparing to die". - Add the category name here as well? Suggestion: In 1979, the National Academy of Recording Arts and Sciences decided to add a Best Disco Recording category for the 22nd Grammy Awards, just as disco was "preparing to die".
- Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 23:43, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
- "In 2003, the Academy moved the category from the "Pop" field into a new "Dance" field, which currently contains the category Best Electronica/Dance Album as well." - Rather than "currently", maybe "which in 2010 contains the Best Electronicica/Dance Album category" would be better. Or maybe just delete "currently"?
- Thanks for the suggestion. I'll have to search for it, but I remember another reviewer taking issue with this same sentence in a previous FL review for another Grammy-related list. --Another Believer (Talk) 23:43, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 19:31, 14 August 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you for much for taking the time to offer a thorough review. I hope you enjoyed the article. --Another Believer (Talk) 23:43, 29 August 2010 (UTC)