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One of my favourite books, I'm aiming at making a Featured Article out of this, and would appreciate any feedback I can get.

Thanks, Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 02:21, 27 October 2014 (UTC)**[reply]

Not much to contribute.

A couple of phrases need attention:
- she tries to spend to with him
- she tries to talk about awkward subject
and this was new to me and looks strange:
- hid-and-side games
Background
- The first three sentences all begin "Brown"
Publication
- A "New Definitive Edition"… the second occurrence of "Brown" in this sentence would be better as "he".
Reception and legacy
- Something odd has happened to the possessive apostrophe in the first sentence of the second paragraph.

That's all from me. Tim riley talk 13:49, 27 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! These should be all fixed now. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 20:34, 27 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- "Hide and side"? not "Hide and seek"? Tim riley talk 00:25, 28 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - Aargh! Fixed. Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 02:49, 28 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]