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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to promote it to WP:GA. I have alread promoted a couple other country music band articles to good-article and followed pretty much the same basic blueprint for this one. In fact, it easily has more sources than either, so I think it might have more of a chance. I would like more suggestions as to what else I should change before sending it to WP:GAN.

Thanks, Ten Pound Hammer, his otters and a clue-bat • (Many otters • One bat • One hammer) 23:09, 26 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: This looks pretty good to me. It's broad in its coverage, neutral, stable, and seems factually accurate and verifiable. I made some minor proofing changes, and I have some suggestions about prose and Manual of Style issues as well as one thought about images. Since we were both working on the article today, I used strikeouts to indicate the suggestions you have responded to already.

Lead

  • "The original Itchy Brother lineup was reunited for 1993's Rave On!! and a compilation album before the band exited Mercury." - Wikilink compilation album on first use?
  • Do you need the terminal period after CBuJ? Its web site doesn't seem to use it.
Done. Brain fart on my part.

History

  • "Fred joined RCA Records artist Sylvia's road band... " - This might be too many modifiers in front of "band". Suggestion: "Fred joined the road band of Sylvia, an RCA Records artist... "

Musical career

  • "The band took its new name from "headchopper", a word that blues musician Muddy Waters used to indicate that he had supplanted another band in a gig." - It might be good to add the new name to this sentence. Suggestion: "The band took its new name, The Kentucky Headhunters, from "headchopper", a word that blues musician Muddy Waters used to indicate that he had supplanted another band in a gig.
  • Wikilink gig?
Done and done.

Pickin' on Nashville

  • "Mercury Records signed the band in 1989 through the assistance of record producer Harold Shedd." - Suggestion: Mercury Records, assisted by record producer Harold Shedd, signed the band in 1989.
  • He also said that the label was reluctant to release the song as a single." - I can't be sure who "he" refers to. It might be Greg Martin, or it might be Fox.
  • "...due to its high local influence." - Does this mean that the record company thought it might not sell well except to a local (Nashville?) audience? Was the liquor store in Nashville?
  • "It was certified double platinum by the RIAA... " - Spell out and abbreviate Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA) on first use?
All four done.

Electric Barnyard

  • "with none of its four singles reaching Top 40 on the U.S. country charts" - Insert "the" between "reaching" and "Top 40"?
  • "Its first singles release was a cover of The Ballad of Davy Crockett... - Wikilink cover on first use?
Both done. Cover is already wikilinked earlier in the article.

Rave On!!

  • "The album sold poorly, despite support from the band's touring with then-labelmate Billy Ray Cyrus." - Suggestion: "Although the band drew attention by touring with then-labelmate Billy Ray Cyrus, the album sold poorly."
Done.

Songs from the Grass String Ranch and Soul

  • "Unlike with their previous albums, the band decided to record entirely original songs for Songs from the Grass String Ranch." - Suggestion: Changing methods, the band decided to record entirely original songs for Songs from the Grass String Ranch.
  • "All five members co-wrote all of its songs, with four also being co-written by Verlon Dale Grissom." - Suggestion: All five members co-wrote the songs with assistance from Verlon Dale Grissom on four of the songs.
Done and done.

Work with other artists

  • "as part of the side project The Mighty Jeremiahs" - Italics for The Mighty Jeremiahs?
Done.

Musical styles

  • "The band's combination of styles is most notable in their cover song choices on their early albums, with all three Mercury albums containing a Bill Monroe cover, and other covers ranging from Waylon Jennings to The Lovin' Spoonful to Carl Perkins." - "Band" is singular, but "their" is plural. Also, the "with + containing" clause is probably not the strongest construction here. Suggestion: The band's combination of styles is most notable in its cover-song choices on early albums. All three Mercury albums contain a Bill Monroe cover and other covers ranging from Waylon Jennings to The Lovin' Spoonful to Carl Perkins.
  • "Their original compositions often take a regional theme, with the single "Dumas Walker" being a notable example." - Suggestion: The band's original compositions, such as the single "Dumas Walker", often develop a regional theme."
  • "At their peak in the early 1990s, The Kentucky Headhunters was considered... " - "At its peak" rather than "at their peak"?
  • Wikilink dark horse?
  • "due to the significant mainstream attention that their works received despite the band's rougher sound" - "Its" rather than "their"? Alternatively, "due to the significant mainstream attention that the band's works received despite its rougher sound"?
All done.

Images

  • As others have noted, the infobox lacks an image. If no free images can be found, it might be better to add a fair-use image of an album cover to the infobox than to use the one in the history section.
  • The source link for Image:Itchy.jpg is circular. It gives no way for fact-checkers to examine the source image in context to make sure the license is OK. The fix for this problem is to track down the source page and provide a link to its url rather than to the image by itself out of context.
As I have said on Finetooth's talk page, I have contacted Greg Martin, and he has agreed to submit a photo to Wikipedia. Ten Pound Hammer, his otters and a clue-bat • (Many otters • One bat • One hammer) 01:41, 7 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

References

  • The page numbers in the citations should be indicated by "p." if a single page and a "'pp." if more than one page. To produce "p.", set the "pages" parameter in the "cite book" citation to "|page" rather than "|pages". I did this for citation 5, but I see others that need fixing.
Done.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 01:15, 7 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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