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Article promoted by Ian Rose (talk) via MilHistBot (talk) 05:30, 4 February 2018 (UTC) « Return to A-Class review list[reply]

Nominator(s): EnigmaMcmxc (talk)

18th Infantry Division (United Kingdom) (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

The ill-fated British division that fought at the Battle of Singapore. I have extensively expanded the article over the last few months, and it has just passed its GA review. I believe it meets the criteria for A-Class, and I am looking to move to an FA-class review following this.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 23:11, 30 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Hawkeye7
  • "In April, limited conscription was introduced." What is limited conscription?
    Only 34,500 men were conscripted (all of the age of 20) as opposed, I suppose, to First World War-era full-scale conscription of everyone? Suggestions for rewording?EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 02:21, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Let me see if I understand this. Men in the TA were drafted into the Regular Army for six months, then discharged to serve in the TA again?
    No. Civvies were conscripted, trained, and then assigned to the newly forming TA units. Per Messenger: "...were called up for six months' service with the Regular army as 'Militiamen' prior to joining new second line Territorial Divisions...". As this has caused confusion, suggestions on how to word better?EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 02:21, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "During 1940, Winston Churchill (now Prime Minister)" But he hasn't been mentioned before.
    Mentioned that Churchill had succeeded Chamberlain.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 02:21, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "United States President" Linlk "president" instead of "United States"
    AddressedEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 02:21, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "every possible unit diverted to the Far East" What units are we talking about?
    A list of all units in a note? I can try and dig it up. From a quick glance, it was a mix of Australian, British, and Indian troops.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 02:21, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    The point here is that it was not every possible unit. That would have involved stripping the Middle East and the United Kingdom of all troops. It wasn't even every available unit; many formations like the 9th Division, 2nd New Zealand Division and 4th Indian Division were available but not sent. Just say "units were diverted to the Far East". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 06:04, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    I see how this can be misconstrued, and have reworded along your suggestion.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 22:08, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "See also: General officer commanding" Don't see the value in this
    It was a left-over from the copy and paste template, and not removed when the term was introduced into the main text; removed.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 02:21, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Hawkeye7 (discuss) 02:46, 1 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for your review Hawkeye, and sorry for the delay in getting back to you. I have addressed some of your concerns, and looking for further feedback on a few others. Regards, EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 02:21, 10 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Support Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:39, 11 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport from PM This article is in great shape. I have a few comments/queries:

That's me done. Great job! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:10, 12 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Peacemaker for your review and comments. I have addressed several issues, and left comments for a few others. I will have to tackle the remainder a little later. Regards, EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 14:54, 17 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Again, thank you for your comments. I believe I have addressed all, with the exception of the First/Second Line and Militiamen points.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 21:33, 18 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments from CPA-5

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It is a great page in my opinion however i have some comments.

  • Can you change this line "Norfolk, Suffolk and Cambridgeshire]]" --> "Norfolk, Suffolk and Cambridgeshire".
    Whoops, left over link removal. Thanks for the catch.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 22:21, 23 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Please (if it's possible of course) put the name of the person who said this below the line "... your message of January 23, in which you said that the evacuation of Singapore would be 'an inexcusable betrayal'. Agreeably with your point of view, we therefore put the 18th Division ... into Singapore instead of diverting them to Burma, and ordered them to fight it out to the end. They were lost at Singapore and did not save it, whereas they could almost certainly have saved Rangoon. I take full responsibility with my colleagues on the Defence Committee for this decision; but you also bear a heavy share on account of your telegram."
    Added Churchill's name to the bottom of the quote.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 22:21, 23 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'd unlink this one "by the parent 54th (East Anglian) Infantry Division." and link this one "a duplicate of the first line 54th (East Anglian) Infantry Division."
    SwitchedEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 22:21, 23 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Needs a capital letter "Adam Park estate" 'cause the main page said that it should written in "Adam Park Estate".
    AmendedEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 22:21, 23 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

That's all i hope it will help you further, i know it was not a lot but i couldn't found any issue anymore. Good luck i really hope it will become an "A article". CPA-5 (talk) 20:42, 21 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Support Image and misc. review by Sturmvogel_66

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