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Battle of Chonan[edit]

Nominator(s): —Ed!(talk)
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I am nominating this article for A-Class review. —Ed!(talk) 01:11, 13 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comments:
    • no dabs, alt text is present and ext links all work (no action required);
    • can you please try to reword the first sentence of the lead, currently it sounds like the third engagement on the night of July 7-8, when you mean third engagement of the war.
    • per the MOS, I think "July 7-8" should be "July 7/8"
    • in the Outbreak of the war section, "Far east" should be fully capitalised IMO as it is a proper noun;
    • This sentence appears to be missing a word: "However, the division was under strength, only two-thirds the size of its regular wartime size". I'd suggest adding "and was" after "strength";
    • some of the sentences are very short and stucatto, indeed it reads like a 2-3 round burst in places. An example is the last bit of the Outbreak of the war section. I'd suggest combining these two sentences;
    • In the last part of the Early engagements section there is a full stop, but the next sentence begins without a capital letter;
    • In the Opening moves section, Osan-Chonan road should have an endash per WP:DASH;
    • In the North Korean attack section, the red link to "Howtizers" is a misspelling - it should be "howitzers" (that might fix up the red link);
    • In the North Korean attack section, I suggest wikilinking "executive officer" and "companies";
    • In the American withdrawal section, I think "...heavy casualties, and was saved..." should be reworded to "heavy casualties, but was saved...";
    • In the American withdrawal section, I suggest wikilinking "mortar". — AustralianRupert (talk) 23:19, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
      • Fixed. I think I have responded to all of your concerns. —Ed!(talk) 01:32, 21 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Question though: I was under the impression that 12:00pm was 0:00 hours, not 24:00. Was this not the case? TomStar81 (Talk) 21:31, 19 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
That's my understanding, too, Tom, but not according to Wikipedia:MOS#Times, which indicates it can be both. That's not definately correct IMO, but who am I to argue with the MOS. — AustralianRupert (talk) 22:46, 19 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I just changed it to "midnight" to avoid any confusion. —Ed!(talk) 01:32, 21 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support I can see no reason why not to. Well done. --Jim Sweeney (talk) 09:26, 21 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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