Talk:Venric Mark

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
Good articleVenric Mark has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
January 3, 2013Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on January 5, 2013.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that 2012 College Football All-American Venric Mark holds the Northwestern records for both single-game kickoff and single-game punt return yards?

GA Review[edit]

GA toolbox
Reviewing
This review is transcluded from Talk:Venric Mark/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Go Phightins! (talk · contribs) 04:25, 1 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this page. Go Phightins! 04:25, 1 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

*Is there any way to consolidate his three positions so it doesn't take up so many lines?

  • In the records section, how is it a reflection on him (not on the poor play of the Northwestern defense) that he has set a record with 9 kick returns in one game. That doesn't seem overly noteworthy.
  • Also in the records section, seeing that he's the current Northwestern kick returner, isn't it pretty obvious he'd be Northwestern's active career leader in kick return yards?
  • Other than that the infobox looks nice and comprehensive. Good work.
Lead

*The lead mentions a different record than the infobox...it says that he holds the career record for kickoff return yards whereas the infobox says that he holds the career (active) record. Which is it?

  • I don't think the lead does a very good job summarizing the early life section...it doesn't exactly lend due weight.
Early years

*Mention where Klein Forest H.S. is in that sentence.

  • In that next sentence, instead of "a private one", simply mention the name of the school to which he transferred.
  • I'm assuming we're talking track and field in that next sentence or two? Clarify please.
  • I'm going to dispute that Mark was expected to star for the team; he gets a one-sentence mention in the article and though it does call him a future star, I didn't take its meaning to be that he'd necessarily do so in the coming season. Perhaps I misread, though.
  • Is it necessary to say how many touchdowns he had called back due to penalty? Those don't count as touchdowns, and likely the penalties were holding, so he may not have scored without them.
    • It still takes an incredibly talented returner to score seven touchdowns seven times even if there was one illegal block or hold on each one.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:46, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Satisfied with this section.

College career

  • Check the capitalization of "co-Player of the Week"...that doesn't seem right to me.
  • Perhaps you could say he "recorded" x return yards rather than he "posted" them; it sounds better in context, in my opinion, though that's just a nit-picky suggestion.
  • How is the blocked-punt return for TD mention relevant to Mark as a player?
  • Link (or redlink as it would seem to meet if an article doesn't exist) Lee Gissendaner.
  • On a more broad, general note, it seems to me that the entire college career section is a bit awkward to read. It's wording seems a bit convoluted at times, and I'm just wondering if there's a way to make it a tad less ambiguous and/or wordy, particularly in the 2012 section.

Personal
  • "preteen" should be "pre-teen", I believe
  • Other than that, this section looks good.
    • Whatever, not a huge deal. Section is fine.
References
  • My spot-check doesn't turn anything up...good work here.

That's all I've got right now. I'm assuming there are no free images of him on the Commons? Go Phightins! 04:46, 1 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]


All right, I'm still a little concerned that the lead doesn't give a terrific preview of the article, but other than that, this looks excellent. Go Phightins! 01:40, 3 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

You know what? It's fine. I don't know what I was thinking, but I just re-read it and it certainly looks GA quality. Closing and listing. Congrats on what must be your 100th GA by now! Go Phightins! 01:42, 3 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

External links modified[edit]

Hello fellow Wikipedians,

I have just modified 2 external links on Venric Mark. Please take a moment to review my edit. If you have any questions, or need the bot to ignore the links, or the page altogether, please visit this simple FaQ for additional information. I made the following changes:

When you have finished reviewing my changes, you may follow the instructions on the template below to fix any issues with the URLs.

This message was posted before February 2018. After February 2018, "External links modified" talk page sections are no longer generated or monitored by InternetArchiveBot. No special action is required regarding these talk page notices, other than regular verification using the archive tool instructions below. Editors have permission to delete these "External links modified" talk page sections if they want to de-clutter talk pages, but see the RfC before doing mass systematic removals. This message is updated dynamically through the template {{source check}} (last update: 18 January 2022).

  • If you have discovered URLs which were erroneously considered dead by the bot, you can report them with this tool.
  • If you found an error with any archives or the URLs themselves, you can fix them with this tool.

Cheers.—InternetArchiveBot (Report bug) 21:36, 26 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Retrieved from "https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:Venric_Mark&oldid=1208357998"